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Inspired-8
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0 posted 2008-05-12 08:09 PM



Sola ga kurai

Kumo ga kurushii

Oame gou
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Darkened skies

Threatening clouds

Heavy rains
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Copyright © 2008 Victor Duna. All rights reserved.


© Copyright 2008 Victor Duna - All Rights Reserved
Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2008-05-12 08:48 PM


Yo Victor,

Very nice.  I can hear it.

Bobby

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2008-05-13 04:16 AM


Nice...James
Earth Angel
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3 posted 2008-05-13 10:02 AM



"Darkened skies

Threatening clouds

Heavy rains "



You certainly did a fine job
of creating an 'atmosphere'
with an economy of words!

I do so love rain storms!


EA

2islander2
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4 posted 2008-05-13 02:43 PM


I like Haikus

this one is luminous and brief as a lightning

  yann

hiddensmiles
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5 posted 2008-05-13 05:36 PM


nice write

JJ

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6 posted 2008-05-14 07:34 AM


hi victor,

you composed the japanese version? i am impressed

shyvl
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7 posted 2008-05-14 08:41 AM


this was so vivid and intense.
sharyn

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Pluto
8 posted 2008-05-14 09:05 AM


Thank you all for reading I am not fluent in Japanese but still trying : )
Virtual Abyss
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9 posted 2008-05-28 12:12 PM


Very interesting, strong, and inspiring.

Thank you!

V/r,

Virtual Abyss


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10 posted 2008-05-30 03:05 AM


Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.  Did I mention that this is beautiful?

Alison

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