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As Time Passes |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA 
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Time As time passes by slowly You are running through my head Left me here unknowingly Leaving me in dread I have known you since I was little Never broken apart You have always been my friend Always from the start As time passes by slowly I miss you more everyday Remembering those wonderful times We would go outside and play No matter the distance apart You will always be my friend Forever until death All the way at the end As time passes by slowly I know I will see you again I will see you in the heavens above When it comes my time to ascend RIP Haley |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
Excellent, as always. A lot of raw emotion in this poem, |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
This is a lovely tribute. Thank u for it. N.B- I think you mean 'ascend' rather than 'descend' |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA |
My bad. Thank you so much. And thank you for the great comments. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Rain...Touching write. Much feelings in your words. Enjoyed...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
There you go Jess, good job....very well done. Looks like I got some serious competition bearing down on me ! John |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA |
Haha if you say so! You have a wider vocabulary that I do, lol. |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Allegedly my vocabulary is so wide I can fit a Dictionary ,Thesaurus & Encyclopeadia in there side by side |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA |
It must be easier to write. I struggle, trying not to repeat words. I have to try my best to have mine in perfect rhythem and rhyme. |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Write it down & don't worry about the rhyming etc at first. Just get the gist of it & play around. Sometimes I can write 7 or 8 lines then get blocked. Then I can sometimes make the last 2 lines the first 2, the 3rd one the last see what I'm saying? You ain't gonna break it I have even made 1 poem out of 2 or 3... |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Tell you what I'll do. With your permission, I'll take one of your poems & break it down & re build it and see what you think? |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA |
Go for it  I would enjoy seeing that. |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
OK, give me a day or 2.....any one in particular or you want me to pick? |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA |
Go with your gut. I have some questions. Do you mind talking to me on another way of communication? MSN? AIM? |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Not at all, tho' I got to get my daughter to set MSN up for me, been threatening to do it for a while now....will let you know when it is sorted, |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA |
Thank you, goodnight to you. And good luck on reconstruction my poem |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Later....G'night |
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