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father , a salesman |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india 
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Father, a salesman (the inspiration of this poem came from Karl C Klein’s Unnatural Girl) : My father was a salesman. That was all and that was all. Memory did not recall The commodities he sold. The houses of his visits, The shops or the offices. A little pack of blue and Obsolete face-crème once found In an ancient attic… “Had it been in his torn bag?” Fingers wanted to trace his Print of past long dead and gray. The summer roads and shut doors The watching bird with lazy Wings folded together, Oh sun, was it a journey He had taken many times? Only at night beside a Wild and black mare he appeared. “What were you?” asked a boy, me! “Go and inquire your deep dream”, Told the dying out image. I know he was a salesman! clever talks delay friendship! |
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LadyTom Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 353LA, CA |
Marvelous. I like this one very much. My dear friend. A very fine poem.  |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Ku, I talk to the moon a lot, never tried with the sun, very eloquently put...John |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
Very much enjoyed this write. |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
Nice poetry! :-D |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
poddarku, A friend and I read Rami aloud to each other on our "reading nights", and I am finding a hint of his style in your words. You're going to quickly become one of my favorites...  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: You touched me deeply with this one. There is this need sometimes to know where we come from, the father is such an important part of our lives. You created great imagery and an atmosphere of suspense, that leaves one with a sigh. I never ever knew mine. Love. Margherita |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
There is superb heartfelt intonation in this writing. I wanted to travel through black and white photos...perhaps connected with my own wish to know more. Excellent! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Ku, you write with such depth and inner vision. A soft, contemplative write. Very well done. Linda |
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