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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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What did I do to be denied what was the sin irreconciled? I am, I am, the babe reviled. I was born a motherless conception greeted by disgust a baby conceived in mistrust. I was shot with pelvic thrust into a world that lied and lied. Daddy, Daddy, save me please? It's said in the good book that sheep even one child gone astray won't be left to drift away. What did I do to be denied? I will write you begging words-- I will write what will be heard if I knew what words to say-- tell me, tell me, how to pray, What did I do to be denied? Apologies for circumstance and sad sad smiles for a bad dance of tango in my unawares... "I'm sorry" dirty underwear wishing I'd worn none. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Once again... you leave me without words. But if I keep reading you I may find them once again.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
You've left me no words....just  |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Lord~~~ serenity... ~beLLe |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I was shot with pelvic thrust into a world that lied and lied." powerful lines, I felt the thrust..  and I disagree...you could never be denied, not where it really counts, all the rest? May not be as important as you think.. "...worn none" The best way to go.. love you so..  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
your way with words is no less impressive than it was last I read you.... well done m'friend... well done |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you are captivating...and your life's experiences have gleemed you a literary expressionist....and if you could paint, I would most certainly be inflicted with Stendhal syndrome and that's a good thing.... hugs to you... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow. Boy, this is powerful Karen. Lot's of lines and phrasing I could quote as being "key" but if I did that, I think I'd be copying the whole poem.  Wonderful expression ... a compelling read throughout every line. VERY much enjoyed this.  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen...the depth and honesty of your writing is naked, just as you wish it to be....and beautiful. |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
You always leave me simply amazed, lady. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all so much--I am always touched by your generosity, especially so these days, while I as so distracted so easily. (I have always hated August--and now it hates me back. )Thanks again for your warmth. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
WOW!!!!!!!! Speechless! Thank you for gifting us with your many messages. Very, very much enjoyed. You're one special cookie to me, serenity. Just thought YOTK! hugs, miscellanea |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
While I'm munching on this food for thought, Perhaps I should cart this off to my library! Yep, yep! to da library and don't spare da horses |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Where is Lylith when ya need her anyhow? Seriously, Ser...good one here. Lends itself to multiple interpretation, too. Miss you, girl........*hugs*....jojo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
And I havent seen your words in awhile, either Good to see you too m'witch |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Babe, Never threaten and never ever beg. Keep it naked! This piece is pure raw power. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
I would not mind at all hearing your works spoken aloud, as you have this gift for vernacular presentation. What you slap together haphazardly sings a poignant voice in a voice which begs for one. And happy belated anniversary. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Lilith...laughing she does slip out occasionally... Thanks to all me lovelies--and special hugs to the gents who show up for me--they ain't askeered. *cracking up* Love to all.. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've always heard that God doesn't make mistakes... but often felt I was evidence to the contrary. Which may be why I feel this to the bone... On the other hand... *S* There is that talent thang of yours... and is it ever tremendous! *S* |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Apologies for circumstance and sad sad smiles for a bad dance of tango in my unawares... "I'm sorry" dirty underwear Great write here... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a powerful, thought-provoking 'write'! [a major fine 'read'] Applause!! |
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