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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2008-01-17 05:52 PM

Wait for me-- encouragement--I will write a symphony;
and angels will dive perilous to hear my shy note quivering
trembling the last note left
hanging on the treble cleft
dangling the precipice of how far I have to fall.

Cheer me on, as I gulp pints, I will prove to you good sport.
I'll spurt the foam through my blown nose and slam it, all victorious
cross-eyed, bottoming the top
with all the brough-ha-ha--heh-ha
dizzy in the jubilance of the moment of the thrall.

And if I see you look away?
A hint of disapproval may
prompt me to don my white gloves
and scold myself in want of love--
I'll be anything at all
just tell me
what
is it
you want...

I'll pick up a dauber's brush and pluck at my own eyelashes
just to get a movement right, delicate in crevices
as a shadow argues line
as if it were the end of time
waiting on a sundial, in seasons of the rain.

* * *

With thanks to the folks in C/A and chopsticks--I made that change suggested, and jim? I kept the "encouragement" because it suited me to do so.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2008-01-17 06:08 PM

Fine writing...James

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2008-01-17 09:02 PM

Serenity... I really am in awe of your wonderful writings... loved this! love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

3 posted 2008-01-17 09:08 PM

Karen this is amazing! Love ya!

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2008-01-18 05:33 AM

And if I see you look away?
A hint of disapproval may
prompt me to don my white gloves
and scold myself in want of love--
I'll be anything at all
just tell me
what
is it
you want...

sad thing is they should love us for who we are...not what or how they want us to be.

M

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2008-01-18 07:34 AM

"And if I see you look away?
A hint of disapproval may
prompt me to don my white gloves
and scold myself in want of love--
I'll be anything at all
just tell me
what
is it
you want..."

this for me was perfection...both the words and the woman.

this "they should love us for who we are"..I disagree...I don't expect everyone to love me for who I am...some just can't/won't take me as I am and I understand that...My rule is to decide if who they are is someone I can live with. If not..I walk away. Now if I could just do that from the get go..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Paul Wilson

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since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

6 posted 2008-01-19 11:08 AM

Karen...Sounds like you are gearing up for the Mardi Gras season. LOL. Done in a style all your own, that no one can duplicate.
Enjoyed...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2008-01-19 11:28 AM

Wait for me-- encouragement--I will write a symphony;
and angels will dive perilous to hear my shy note quivering
trembling the last note left
hanging on the treble cleft
dangling the precipice of how far I have to fall.

Gosh, Karen, this is simply dazzling!

love,
Margherita

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

8 posted 2009-11-28 01:00 AM

This is so right on. Needs more readers. jo

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

9 posted 2009-11-28 01:01 AM

forgot to save

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

10 posted 2009-11-28 05:25 AM

and I forgot to thank you...

nod

usually, it's the ones that are my heart that I ignore.

Jo? ((((((((((((((

}}}}}}}}}}}}}

I love you all.

sandgrain
Member Elite

since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

11 posted 2009-11-28 03:00 PM

I'm so glad someone brought this up again as some of these old slow people miss things, ya know. Your words are music at it's finest, dear one. I love it.

God bless,
Rae

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