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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2008-01-10 04:41 AM


Carlos oh Carlos

It never hurts to have a hitman for a friend
just in case you have to do somebody in.
Of course you'll have to introduce him to your
friends as a waiter or your insurance man
and whatever they can't do a 9mm sure can.
Sometimes a little more finesse is required
to enforce the outcome that is desired.
I'm not saying it moral but its definately mortal,
nor is it legal but it tends to be lethal,
not necessarily fun and most often fatal.
Go ahead and make my day, breathe in your
last gasp of fresh air today, for you'll
never see tomorrow once the hitman is paid.
What you gonna do when he comes for you,
perhaps break down and cry just before you die.
No man can stop where the hitmans bullets go
but Jesus can still save your immortal soul.

JamesLee
10January
2008






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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 2008-01-10 05:02 AM


smiles... I'll make that call to Jesus any day James.... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

passing shadows
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2 posted 2008-01-10 10:04 AM


James, I'm glad I don't have a hitman as a friend...I sure didn't like jail at all.

loved the ending line in this

Clang
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3 posted 2008-01-10 10:14 AM


In my darkest depressions I often longed for death, it doesn't scare me.  What I would have done for a hitman friend on those days (for myself, of course).  Great poem.
Huan Yi
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4 posted 2008-01-10 12:43 PM




Good . . .

John

TomMark
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5 posted 2008-01-10 01:28 PM


Very good, sir. as good as your love poem.
enjoyed
Tomtoo

vandana
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6 posted 2008-01-10 05:56 PM


enjoyed
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