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aziza
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since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

0 posted 2007-12-30 06:08 PM

Homeless Words

My poem sucked no matter how I writ it
Nothing could fix it
I pondered and wondered and threw it away
I’ll try again today
I knocked my head and chewed my pen
Well, I woulda done that way back when
Now I strike my keys

Infuriatingly

‘Cause my poem sucked and I couldn’t fix it
- No matter how I writ it.

If the actual truth were to be told,
No ideas took hold
They flitted like swallows enjoying the rain
Scattering in my brain
Evaporating into empty yawning space
Words with no place
To call home

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Alison

effjayel
Senior Member

since 2007-09-30

Posts 1474
At the Crossroads of Infinity

1 posted 2007-12-30 06:14 PM

That'sit ! That is exactly how it happens to me...Amazing Alison, you sum it up so perfectly ! Happy New Year

John

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2007-12-30 06:22 PM

Fun write.
But a wordless home
would totally suck!

lucky
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since 2000-01-17

Posts 1601
Idaho

3 posted 2007-12-30 06:34 PM

Oh Yeah... I think
they have a home all right... but
our problem is that home is caught
in your sleeping head...

so wake up and spit out a few more...lol
(please don't take my muse, you're all I have)

nicely said Alison
dale

[This message has been edited by lucky (12-30-2007 07:35 PM).]

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2007-12-30 07:02 PM

what a slice of "every-poet's-life" dejavu!

I absolutely LOVE:

"ideas...
flitt(ing) like swallows enjoying the rain...";

AND:

"Words with no place
To call home"

Applause!

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2007-12-30 08:38 PM

Enjoyed Aziza!!!!!

ARCTIC WIND

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

6 posted 2007-12-30 10:04 PM

John,

How you made me smile -- thank you for understanding.

Happy New Year,
Alison

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Midnitesun darlin'

I think homes always have words.  I am just not sure that the words all move in at the same time.  Know what I mean?

Thank you for enjoying.  Happy New Year.

A

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Dale,

Maybe sometimes we are all just Rip Van Winkle's trying to wake up - creativity does kind of take a snooze now and then, doesn't it.

Happy New Year.
Alison

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Bruce,

Thank you, my friend.  It's always wonderful to see that you have stopped in to share your thoughts.  I treasure your words - and you have a fan in me.

Happy New Year.
A

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Thank you, Arctic Wind.

Happy New Year.
A

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2007-12-30 10:55 PM

This is so true and that's just where I'm at
this point in time. I think there's too much going on right now, can't concentrate.
Happy New Year!
Ida

james.bowie
Junior Member

since 2007-12-29

Posts 14
bangor, Maine

8 posted 2007-12-30 11:05 PM

this happens every time you have a good idea-I share your frustration

A real man kisses his children goodnight

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

9 posted 2007-12-31 01:56 AM

my dear friend Ali... you writ this so well!! Happy New Year darling girl... may happiness and peace visit your doorstep in 2008... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

10 posted 2007-12-31 06:27 AM

ms az...when we try to write it don't happen...when we don't try...we ooze words like a avalanche. enjoyed you here

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

11 posted 2007-12-31 06:53 AM

well, I can hardly believe it was that bad, especially after reading this...astounding write...

ya wanna know what really sucks? Instant coffee, cause I'm to lazy to make regular....

there's a poem waiting to happen....

Hugs
Lee J.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2008-01-02 07:10 AM

This brought some thoughts from a book that I am reading...the book is Poets' Corner, compiled by John Lithgow, anyway here are some interesting thoughts from a dead poet that won a Pulitzer Prize in 1948...
"Why do you want to write poetry?" if the young man answers, "I have important things I want to say," then he is not a poet. If he answers, "I like hanging around words listening to what they say," then maybe he is going to be a poet...W.H. Auden.

Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

13 posted 2008-01-02 09:24 AM

Homeless words are a valuable resource for
other poems at other times, but you know that.
Yes, frustrating when it doesn't come together, I hear ya'.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

14 posted 2008-01-02 12:14 PM

liked it

ivordavies
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since 2007-01-10

Posts 739
Chester, England

15 posted 2008-01-02 07:43 PM

Your poem sucks,
or so you say,
it can't be fixed
in any way?

What is it
that you find so wrong?
The way the words
are strung along?

Or is it meter
or the rhyme
or just the order
in each line?

Maybe you think
the meaning's lost
and can't be found
at any cost.

Is it your muse
who's gone away
and left you
on your own today?

A poet's lot's
a woeful tale
when inspiration
won't prevail.

But poets know
they have to write,
even if their words
are trite.

And even when
they've nought to say,
their pen will still
dictate their way

So write your lines
so all can see
how nothing
becomes poetry!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

16 posted 2008-01-02 08:03 PM

Seems like the contagious disease is making
it's way through the ranks....Been there,
done that...still done that...

Thanx Alison...

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

17 posted 2008-01-05 01:34 AM

Ida

Thanks for understanding.  I do so look forward to your poetry and your comments.

A

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james.bowie

It sucks sometimes, huh.  Thank you and it is good to "meet" you here on these pages.

Alison

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RD-B

You make me smile every time I see you.  Thank you, dahlink (that is sophisticated sounding, huh).

Hugs
A

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D

So true and I really appreciate you reminding me of this from time to time.  You always reassure me when I think the words are gone for good.

A

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LeeJ,

Oh my God, you are so right.  Instant coffee is a sin.  Espeically with dried creamer from those little packets.

Thank you - you truly understand and I will be looking for your poem.

A

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James,

What a lovely gift you dropped by.

"Why do you want to write poetry?" if the young man answers, "I have important things I want to say," then he is not a poet.  If he answers, "I like hanging around words listening to what they say," then maybe he is going to be a poet...W.H. Auden.

Thank you,
Alison

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Kahlil,

Yep, you are write.  I have one liners in my draft file .. and the file is filling up fast.

A

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Ivor

I miss you when you are gone too long.  Such a special response - and so true.  You make me smile while you make me think.  I love that.

Alison

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Magnus,

It's a disease that I hope we all are recovering from.  Thank you for dropping by - it's a pleasure to read your words.

Alison

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