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TomMark
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since 2007-07-27

Posts 2133
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0 posted 2007-12-28 03:07 PM

I write my poems on this blue screen
you write, on my heart

I write mine with this color green
You write with your love

I care not my book is misweened
for your words circulate my blood

Shall one day it is stolen
your wisdom would be my engine
propelled with your breath
so it is your life
to keep mine living

Then wake up, my dear,
go writing

[This message has been edited by TomMark (12-28-2007 05:25 PM).]

Just another Pete
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since 2007-12-06

Posts 74
Scotland

1 posted 2007-12-28 05:02 PM

Lovely, both in idea and the simple opening lines which have a nice I / you structure. Happy Hogs for New Years eve

Pete

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2007-12-28 06:57 PM

misweened ? hmmm, now there's a word I have not heard before - best go and look it up I think!

I liked your words here TomMark... well done - Happy New Year to you too! RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2007-12-28 07:07 PM

To awake from such dream;
to hear the words of going forth...

these are simple moments,
to be treasured.

Well done, TM. Thank you...

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

4 posted 2007-12-28 09:58 PM

A loving invitation to go on being creative and share the gift of love.

Very lovely.

Love,
Margherita

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

5 posted 2007-12-28 10:07 PM

TM

I am glad that you write with your heart - and I am glad that you are among us sharing your thoughts, your poems and that heart that you write of. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.

A

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2007-12-29 02:23 AM

A nice write...James

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

7 posted 2007-12-29 05:27 PM

interesting 'write!'

I like the closing lines in particular:

"wake up, my dear,
go writing(!)"

applause!

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