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Age Racer
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Age Racer |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Age Racer Crevices and wrinkles canvas her face Steps stumble, betray determination Old age, undaunted, fights to win time’s race Fingers tremble, refuse to stay in place Body rests in quiet meditation Crevices and wrinkles canvas her face Once a New York walker who set the pace Mind and body war in confrontation Old age, undaunted, fights to win time’s race Cane’s rounded handle tight in palm’s embrace Hazel eyes glitter, spark indignation Crevices and wrinkles canvas her face Braves geriatric chapters with subtle grace Incapacity gets no attention Crevices and wrinkles canvas her face Old age, undaunted, fights to win time’s race Alison [This message has been edited by aziza (12-04-2007 03:02 AM).] |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Nice writing, Alison, as always. Ida |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
This is very good. I just learned this style from Sir Brad' poem Mt.Halla. very good. Tom |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Ida Thank you You are sure kind to me -- and you know, I love it! Alison --- Tom Thank you. I have been working on Villanelles for some time now. Hopefully, one day I'll get them right. I keep working on this one as it is a very personal part of my life. Thank you for reading. Alison |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms az...she sounds like my kind of woman..got a number for me? enjoyed it babe |
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CudMonk Junior Member
since 2007-11-28
Posts 21 |
Well done. I very much enjoyed it. I think that all poems about age are inspiring, namely because it is one of the few human experiences the vast majority of us will go through. Some people find God in their lives... others fall in love... most are friends with depression. Yet, with the exception of those who die young, we will ALL wither with age. Frankly, I'm always surprised there's not more poetry on the subject circulating. Anyway, good job. -Adam |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Nice villanelle! I've been working on one, too, and it's a challenge. Ironically, mine is about my elderly mother. Always enjoy reading you, Az. |
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