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Visiting Mother On A Full Moon Cold Night In Fall
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Visiting Mother On A Full Moon Cold Night In Fall |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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In the blank eternity of the restless ocean sleep the unworn dreams of the countless and lost. The sea has no season for memory, whether in hiss and shift caressing the sand with a glistening moonlit kiss inspiring lovers entwined in their dance, or in thunder and surge conjuring storms perhaps by chance to leave me alive, alone and in wonder; I shouldn't be out here keepers tell me, my frailties having not run their course; there is ice in the wind yet it warms me as stretching old arms to grasp the entirety pressing home on my soul the reality, the opening door to the surety, I am as aware as I can be if I am the child of god I am also the child of satan, and in this human duality, vast beyond the reach of my sanity, drift my own dreams, countless and lost. ©2007 by icebox . |
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Xillus_Xavier Member
since 2007-10-05
Posts 72Alabama |
This is really good! Thouroughly entertaining to the last word. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear icebox......I can see you, just so.  |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
You've carried me through worlds of memory here, in delight. I love your words: "there is ice in the wind yet it warms me as stretching old arms to grasp the entirety" My own stretching aging arms reach to grasp the entirety every time it snows. Snowflakes spark such bright memories. You couldn't be a child of satan, dear sir, when you love God's creation and nature so much. I will assume that you are, like I am, a child of God only. I recognize the hidden depths behind the lyrics written. Deeper and mysterious. Your writing is very beautiful. I'll be watching for more poetry! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I had a perfectly lovely reply that I just lost...*pout* OH. I think I said something about how I suspect that you just humor your "keepers". Rosemary quoted my favorite line too: "there is ice in the wind yet it warms me" You are brilliant, but subtle, and I think your stuff goes overlooked at times because of that, but that is a curse of refinement methinks. I'm a fan--but you've known that since your first post here at Pip. And yep, I can be annoying as fly (and on some days I pack thrice the buzz) so thank you for your patience with me while I gush. As for keepers? Smile. Yes, you are.  |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a most effective 'write!'... the following is especially fine!: "In the blank eternity of the restless ocean sleep the unworn dreams of the countless and lost. The sea has no season for memory, whether in hiss and shift caressing the sand with a glistening moonlit kiss inspiring lovers entwined in their dance, or in thunder and surge conjuring storms perhaps by chance to leave me alive, alone and in wonder:" serious, sustained applause!! |
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Fairplay Member
since 2007-01-15
Posts 222England |
Yep the sea is a big place....I have been in lots of seas calm ones nice ones romantic ones unforgiving ones...the best you can hope to do it treat it with respect... Eric |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Yes, I think serenity blaze is right. You are sometimes overlooked because of your brilliance and maybe not understood by some. No moon and June, just powerful, raw emotion and beautiful, deep contemplation Let's give them another chance. Ida |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I also have to ditto Karenity - Rosemary nailed the best lines but all were necessary to highlight those that stood out.  |
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