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the view is nocturnal
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the view is nocturnal |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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Sparrows of branches rains tragic tempo the dance is the butterfly mist on the mountain no lover to hold me its all flimsy anyhow the rain drowns its puddles the view is nocturnal as it flies past my eyes [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (11-20-2007 11:27 AM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Sparrows of branches rains lulling tempo the dance is the butterfly mist on the mountain" Gorgeous images, mood, ~ and poetic mode!  "no lover to hold me its all flimsy anyhow as the rain drowns its puddles the view is nocturnal as it flies through my eyes." ~ The stark contrast to the first half of your poem, is quite startling ~ and compelling! However, that contast works well in conveying the change of mood. ~ and might I add that your posts are always in perfect poetry mode! May the sparrows sing and the butterflies dance for you, every day of your life! Loving hug, EA |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
To me this was totally compelling... the ying/yang of balance or maybe the good/bad depending on the day.. I am in the same place and it seems it should be there, they should be there..and physcially their being is, but not a spirit of giving anything, but for themselves. I am surrounded but feel alone...that is how it feels... I talk too much.  But I loved this as it touched me. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Fantastic imagery. The night is so solomn and deep, as the emotions here portrayed. All Blessing for a warm Thanksgiving Inked One...much as we are blessed to have you back here to share this feast! TD |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thank you kindly ladies  |
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