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Two Gone By |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA 
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The middle of the blackened night riding Highway 75, sky watching, as he drives. Two trails of light, shooting stars, he says, “meteorites.” Well, of course, that’s what they say they are.....but. Two big souls have left. I blink; my vision blurred. Sadness comes upon my heart, like grey clouds now that cloak the stars and even my periphery seems veiled -- curtains of a certain grief -- as I wonder, wonder who was freed from this confine we call the Earth, and who at home sits and mourns those precious flames, caught only in my glance. [This message has been edited by iliana (11-15-2007 08:16 AM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
nicely shared~~ I don't get to see "shooting stars" very often...but when I do I will now think of them differently. M |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thanks for the nice comment, M-Lady. We are driving to Missouri to see my son who is at Advanced Infantry Training; driving all nite and I brought my computer to plug into the car -- right now, got a pretty good signal. Actually, since writing this we have seen several more falling stars, one of which was very close, in fact, close enough that we could see the tail which looked like it was smoking. I thought about our troops in Iraq and Afghanistan as I wrote this. *hugs*....jo |
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Gumpy Member
since 2007-11-06
Posts 143Canada |
Wonderful piece. My three daughters and I love to lie down in the field at night, when camping, and star gaze. Really enjoyed this read. Gumpy Heartbroken |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
hmm, thought provoking, I love how you wrote it. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
There is something extra-special about a poem that is written at the moment of inspire!  lily jo, so be the case with this 'stellar' write! I enjoyed this poetic sharing of your celestial experience. Love & Star Light, Linda  |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 I am computer challenged, but are you telling me you can actually can plug a computer into a car now? Good grief!  I get furious with my son when I am in the car, while he is on the phone, watching a movie, and now I find out he can also plug in his laptop! Oh, but I forgot to mention that I did like your poem.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
iliana, Beautiful. Alison |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Your interpretation of these shooting stars is very poignant, dear Jo. This is a very beautiful write. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed  ARCTIC WIND |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Jo... I knew immediately upon reading this that you were looking beyond the heavens, and into the hearts of families, and losses, and the bigger picture. Is it because I know you, that I knew that? Or is it because your words speak so well, metaphorically, to the days' designs? I don't know. All I know is that I felt your heart beat... and that is what poetry, and poets, are all about. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh Jo, those shooting stars sound much like my rainbow dancing lights of Alaska, the ones I saw the night of 9.11.01. Hug your son for me too, please, and know I'll be thinking of him....and you. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
very nicely done, loved the mood that I could easily feel. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thank you all so very much for your kind remarks. Love to all.......jo PS - Sharon, the car just serves as the power station for my puter.....I've got an ATT air card that gives me the net for a monthly fee while traveling. It's great when I have a signal. PPS: Linda -- what a sweet thing to say, dear friend. PPPS: Karilea, yep you know me, SIL....how well! PPPPS: Kacy, just hugs for sharing that with me. PPPPPS: Gumpy, what you and your daughters do with star gazing is exactly what my father used to do with my little sister and me. These are memories they will cherish for a lifetime. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Wow. I always thought shooting stars were special. Now I understand why. Thanks.  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Lovely write, beautiful take on shooting stars. Ida |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Understanding this. You were on a mission. Hug that boy and keep him in your heart . Love, "late" |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
I was bound to cry today...this one did it, caught me on a shooting star and primed the pumps. Beautiful poem, and broken hearts do leave the sky in streaks of flames. ~ K |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You know I'll never look again at a shooting star and see only a wish... right? *S* What a beautiful, touching write! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Just wanted to pop in hear and thank you all for your sweet responses. Hugs to all.......jo |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
You know, I think this needs to come right back to the top. So, here it is. I always get what I want (or so I tell myself) A |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow!!!! Not often I'm grabbed by something ... but this snapped in deep and held tight, my friend...brought tears at 'two big souls have left' and that makes you a rarity because it's seldom words touch me that way. Awesome... Don't normally pass by your writing, even if I don't comment on all, but somehow I did on this .... certainly glad it finally found me. It would have been a huge loss to have missed it completely....will be more careful to 'see' you in the future... jimmy |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
just came back in...#%%^@-it! Still broached the ducts! Hat's off to you...me friend, must be something in the Houston air.... and, by the way, long as I'm being maulding...I've always loved this picture of you...don't change it any time soon. Jimmy |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Jo... stunning write my friend RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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