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Kalle
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0 posted 2007-10-29 01:06 PM


These are what they are.

Or seem to be.

And an ant in his own kind of Automobile thinks the same. (He ain`t got no classic radio station)
I don`t sing "Stuck inside of mobile with the Memphis Blues again", this time neither.

(Then again I didn`t know Mozart myself that well)

I walk into a Post-modern forest.

This one ain`t green baby.

It`s neon.

And I ain`t green either.

I`m a Thinker-Statue.

(Shuubiduubaduudei)

Refrain...



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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
1 posted 2007-10-29 01:42 PM


Well, whatever it is that you're drinking ~ I'll have some! Sanity isn't all that it is cracked up to be! lol

EA

Kalle
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Finland
2 posted 2007-10-29 03:06 PM


That`ll be tap-water
Seeker72
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Oregon USA
3 posted 2007-10-29 11:18 PM


I think you just went shopping in the Mall of my mind.

Loved it.

ArtSolstice
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4 posted 2007-10-30 08:33 AM


A constructive critique? Neon is so 20th Century, don't you think? Not the color of a Post-modern forest. To be Post-modern, it helps to know who Mozart was, what the Thinker was, and what neon is, so you can go beyond it appropriately.
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