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antiquing time's treasures
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antiquing time's treasures |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
the village carver shaved his graven shards of mem’ries past and bygone days so warm when hearts were filled with sunshine drifts and precious things were precious still to those whose days were filled with pain and sore travail whose lives were lived in yesteryear’s dark veil the carver carved and shed his craft as peasant bards sang of thoughts and things that show our hearts its charm and gave to those who sought such shadowed gifts the memoirs of a lifetime passed that simply pose to remind the drifter of life’s dreams that time will not avail to keep the drifting of life’s pains, to keep and not to fail as graven shards their carver carved and lent to now their soul |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Great imagery here! As I followed your quill, I found myself on a Victorian Street, and in a shop by the dusty road of a town in the old west...even the Twenties roared by for a glimpse. I especially liked how you let the shards that fell away find use in your rendering. I looked forward to this one, and will the next. TD |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I absolutely adore this rhyme scheme! excellent theme also! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
thanks TD...I spend a lot of times around antique collectibles and you really see the past as they speak to us... thank you dixie, wasn't sure that the rhyme scheme was that noticeable...employed it just to keep me honest  |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
An enjoyable read. Thanx Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Steaven~ It is really good to see your ink spilled on the pages blue~ Hope all is well in your dusty corner of the world~ Hey ... check out the announcement forum - /pip/Forum3/HTML/004215.html It has finally come about~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
a truly mystic and spiritual read..sensational classic with high beams and inspiration bought to life. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
thanks Interloper for the kind comment thank you Marge...everything is fine, but we are no longer dusty or dry...seems everything is wet these days LeeJ, thank you for reading and leaving such a nice comment |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I also enjoyed the rhyme scheme steaven nice work |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
adding to library* |
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