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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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the back door is lovely wood sometimes it is a woman warm leaning to my back lonely wanting my hands to touch hinges and then the window winks sultry in her whispering mist exposing more than she should but she knows my eyes are hungry and the floor with promises of tiptoe secrets hidden under she says it is ok for me to be there long as I recline with her fibers and then the ceiling grinning down watching the unraveling of proper as lady and gentleman are discarded and man and woman appear restless to writhe where the wall women whisper _____________ daark |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I so enjoyed reading between the lines and layers of this one D. Oh yes, if houses could talk, what stories they would tell. You sir, have incredible talent. Possibly, your best ever.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
listen to the lilt of this alliteratively lovely last line... warm chills...all over. Wonderful! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
delicious Mr Daark... RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh to be a wall in your house....  the things that would be seen....  I really enjoyed this, you can turn such simple things into living breathing, heart beating things.  |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Of course I enjoyed this, you are a great poet. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms donna, thank you babe. __________ ms sun, thank you for the read and touch __________ ms r&b thank you for the moments of eye time ________ ms suesea, me casa is such a naughty casa..with a welcome mat too, thanks babe ____________ ms domsi' you smile me with your reads and comments, and your art is amazing, thanks ms |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"as lady and gentleman are discarded and man and woman appear restless" oh those windows of yours stranger darlin' and oh those words of yours |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Something about this made my heart homesick. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
This felt very tense and sinful, between the lines were such images, want and lust, need and trust, human, animal, each line held moments and the moments I lived. Wonderful work here daark, enjoyed. Rick |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Definitely one of your good ones..You have such a gift for writing in a style that only you can give to us...Thanx!! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
every time i read you i feel as if i need a shower giggle |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
the back door is lovely wood sometimes it is a woman warm leaning to my back lonely wanting my hands to touch hinges come back for another read Mr Daark... these opening lines touch me.. RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ladyone, thanks ladyfriend for the eyes ____________ ms az, may your heart be healed with gentle sighs, thank you _______________ Rick, thanks for the read my friend _______________ magnus, it is a pleasure to have your review sir, thank you ____________ slick one, may I join you under the rain? thanks babe!! ___________ ms r&b, would always want you to come back again for more, thanks ms |
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Aloneinmyhead Junior Member
since 2007-07-08
Posts 30Tennessee |
All I can say is WOW. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi DS I think if I were going to be part of a house, I would be a window....one that opened and closed so I could enter and leave when I wanted to. I like this!  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
alone, thank you __________ martie, thanks little neighbor |
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ladylisa Member
since 2007-04-29
Posts 342Florida USA |
Each time I read your work I see something new in the words. Amazing talent Dark Stranger, truly gifted!!!!! |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Still counting flowers on the wall... shadow dancing of course! ....  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ladylisa, thanks for the blessing..just a humble ol penspeaker though __________ ms kl, thanks lady friend for the eyes |
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