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Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

0 posted 2007-07-05 10:43 PM

This is passive; my keystrokes elongated
turned downward into furrowed thought;
telling stories of lives made up with simple words.
A patronizing emblem rests smooth along your fingers,
a heart throbs with each beat, echoing sadness
into hollow chambers of an empty closet.
A lie spinning, twists into a tornado damaging my ears;
the sliver or truth beams down from the dark sky,
asking for favors that cannot be granted.
Rose colored satin melting into skin, I wear it on my sleeve,
with validation. Give me a reason not to mourn.
There is nothing left, debris of your presence, sprinkles
the floor of this bedroom; I smile only at the memories.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

1 posted 2007-07-06 01:43 AM

"Give me a reason not to mourn."

very plaintive words here Page
the words of a heartbroken woman

lovely

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2007-07-06 02:22 AM

"Rose colored satin melting into skin, I wear it on my sleeve,
with validation. Give me a reason not to mourn."

I love this--you caught a gentle edge of insistancy! Very acute, and not without a gentility.

sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet

Much enjoyed.

poettothecars
Senior Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 1093
New Zealand

3 posted 2007-07-06 02:49 AM

In having survived from a tornado 24 hours ago I had to come and read your poem

Thank you

CWH

a poet who cares

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

4 posted 2007-07-06 07:31 AM

Thank you all.

Poet, you survived a tornado...not a real one?

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2007-07-06 07:52 AM

Wow Page, just wow! Very impressive writing, and much enjoyed.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2007-07-06 08:17 AM

That sort of tornado can certainly do a number on one's emotional well-being! I could feel your emotive words right in the pit of my stomach as they conjured up some painful memories of my own.

Very well done!

EA

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

7 posted 2007-07-06 08:54 AM

Thank you Earth and Gentle... This poem definitely expresses how I have felt

Aloneinmyhead
Junior Member

since 2007-07-08

Posts 30
Tennessee

8 posted 2007-07-08 10:27 AM

Wow, since the first of yours I wrote I have to read all of them. I can really see your pain in this.

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

9 posted 2007-07-08 05:49 PM

Thank you Alone...

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2007-07-10 08:10 AM

Nicely done...James

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

11 posted 2007-07-10 08:49 AM

Thank you James.

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