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Tornado |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643
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This is passive; my keystrokes elongated turned downward into furrowed thought; telling stories of lives made up with simple words. A patronizing emblem rests smooth along your fingers, a heart throbs with each beat, echoing sadness into hollow chambers of an empty closet. A lie spinning, twists into a tornado damaging my ears; the sliver or truth beams down from the dark sky, asking for favors that cannot be granted. Rose colored satin melting into skin, I wear it on my sleeve, with validation. Give me a reason not to mourn. There is nothing left, debris of your presence, sprinkles the floor of this bedroom; I smile only at the memories. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Give me a reason not to mourn." very plaintive words here Page the words of a heartbroken woman lovely |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Rose colored satin melting into skin, I wear it on my sleeve, with validation. Give me a reason not to mourn." I love this--you caught a gentle edge of insistancy! Very acute, and not without a gentility. sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet Much enjoyed.  |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
In having survived from a tornado 24 hours ago I had to come and read your poem Thank you CWH a poet who cares |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you all. Poet, you survived a tornado...not a real one? |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Wow Page, just wow! Very impressive writing, and much enjoyed. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
That sort of tornado can certainly do a number on one's emotional well-being! I could feel your emotive words right in the pit of my stomach as they conjured up some painful memories of my own. Very well done!  EA |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you Earth and Gentle... This poem definitely expresses how I have felt |
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Aloneinmyhead Junior Member
since 2007-07-08
Posts 30Tennessee |
Wow, since the first of yours I wrote I have to read all of them. I can really see your pain in this. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you Alone... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nicely done...James |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you James. |
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