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Martie
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0 posted 2007-07-01 09:06 PM



Lay me down gently;
I am worn smooth.
A hand can slide across my skin
and not be aware of the striations
from time's window wrapped there.

The umber of my hair
is like shade on sunlight,
and silk to the finger's touch;
slipping through the weave
leaves a song
that passes the bleeding ache of need,
not noticing the cusp of time
in balance there.

I am singing again with the youth
of loud exuberance
and my opera pleases me.
Light the window of my expression
and feel me scratch you with my fingernails
filled with dirt ... damp and determined.

Where are my wings then?

High and mighty there is a place
long past the sky or any crazy bird;
it flies with colors that have no words
and doesn't need explanation.
One day I will know the way there.

Come to me in the twilight,
as the sky descends into the warm earth
and the last flying bat snaps the smallest wing.
Lie down in the tall grass and listen.

The crickets will be stopped
by our rustling breath's loud whirr.
Catch my mouth as you exhale
and lick my fragile lower lip
to still the quiver.

Lay me down gently.

© Copyright 2007 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
The Lady
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1 posted 2007-07-01 10:29 PM




"Catch my mouth as you exhale
and lick my fragile lower lip
to still the quiver.

Lay me down gently."

oh Martie
it is all so perfect...


Larry C
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2 posted 2007-07-01 10:44 PM


Martie,
Romance at its finest. I really enjoyed this piece so much. Thank you.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Krawdad
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3 posted 2007-07-01 11:48 PM


If we could choose . . .
it would be gentle
and close to the earth,
like this.

e

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4 posted 2007-07-02 01:04 AM



"Catch my mouth as you exhale
and lick my fragile lower lip
to still the quiver.

Lay me down gently."



Yes, there can be heaven on earth.


Linda

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5 posted 2007-07-02 02:54 AM


Marti, A most excellent  write. Enjoyed, martyjo
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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6 posted 2007-07-02 03:08 AM


Martie... this is beautiful!  RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Sunshine
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7 posted 2007-07-02 07:28 AM


I cannot expound on Lady's comments...
because she is oh so correct.

aziza
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8 posted 2007-07-02 09:47 AM


Beautiful.

A

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9 posted 2007-07-03 08:13 AM


Martie - this is so special - you do write images for us that take our breath away - Paul
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10 posted 2007-07-03 08:24 AM


This is exquisit
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11 posted 2007-07-03 09:07 AM


Your best? Impossible to say, the field is simply too large to judge. One of your best? Most certainly.

This poem is a thing of beauty, as clear a window into your own spirit, as I have seen.

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12 posted 2007-07-03 09:33 AM


I am singing again with the youth
of loud exuberance
and my opera pleases me.

I definitely think this beautiful expression of romance is one of your best. I particularly love these lines of self-celebration... fantastic work!!

Dr.Moose1
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13 posted 2007-07-03 11:54 PM


Dear Martie,
I wrote something of the consummation of your skills, only to have it dissappear.
In my opinion, I view this to be art in its' purest form. Please sculpt, paint, draw,write,act,sing,dance, and by any and all means, write us another.
Doc

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14 posted 2007-07-04 02:31 AM


WoW... thats all i can say
Kit McCallum
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15 posted 2007-07-04 07:36 AM


Ahhhh ... Martie! The images you bring to mind through your words are exquisite as always. To read you ... is such a treat to my senses. Much enjoyed.

Best wishes,
/Kit

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16 posted 2007-07-04 09:56 AM


Gosh dear one,  where have I been hiding
you for about the past year?  Sorry that I
have been so neglectful...

Here,  have a splash of clear cool water!
On me.

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17 posted 2007-07-04 11:07 AM


oh Martie, this is exquisite poetry! I doubt I've read anything so lovely here or elsewhere.
Thank you sweet poet, for the graceful library treasure.

Nan
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18 posted 2007-07-05 07:23 AM


Good morning fair lady.  Liz is visiting Cape Cod for the holiday weekend.  Before we go to work, we're reading some fabulous poetry.  YOU, of course, are first on our list.  Your words are stunningly perceptive as always.  Thank you from both of us.. We love you...
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19 posted 2007-07-09 10:43 PM


marvelous 'write'!

I just had to try to bring this back to the top  of the 'P.I.P.-land' queue!

sustained applause!!

Honeybunch
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20 posted 2007-07-10 08:20 AM


Martie - this is absolutely fantastic!  How did I miss it?  Perhaps I was meant to so I can bump it up for those who are blind like me.  Really very, very, good - I'm in awe!
Elizabeth Santos
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21 posted 2007-07-10 11:14 AM


I have read this over many times and each time it is a fresh breath of air
Your talent always amazes me
And I love  you
Liz

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