Open Poetry #40 |
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Lay Me Down Gently |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California ![]() |
Lay me down gently; I am worn smooth. A hand can slide across my skin and not be aware of the striations from time's window wrapped there. The umber of my hair is like shade on sunlight, and silk to the finger's touch; slipping through the weave leaves a song that passes the bleeding ache of need, not noticing the cusp of time in balance there. I am singing again with the youth of loud exuberance and my opera pleases me. Light the window of my expression and feel me scratch you with my fingernails filled with dirt ... damp and determined. Where are my wings then? High and mighty there is a place long past the sky or any crazy bird; it flies with colors that have no words and doesn't need explanation. One day I will know the way there. Come to me in the twilight, as the sky descends into the warm earth and the last flying bat snaps the smallest wing. Lie down in the tall grass and listen. The crickets will be stopped by our rustling breath's loud whirr. Catch my mouth as you exhale and lick my fragile lower lip to still the quiver. Lay me down gently. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Catch my mouth as you exhale and lick my fragile lower lip to still the quiver. Lay me down gently." oh Martie it is all so perfect... |
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Larry C![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Martie, Romance at its finest. I really enjoyed this piece so much. Thank you. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
If we could choose . . . it would be gentle and close to the earth, like this. e |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Catch my mouth as you exhale and lick my fragile lower lip to still the quiver. Lay me down gently." ![]() Yes, there can be heaven on earth. ![]() Linda |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Marti, A most excellent write. Enjoyed, martyjo |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Martie... this is beautiful! RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I cannot expound on Lady's comments... because she is oh so correct. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Beautiful. A |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - this is so special - you do write images for us that take our breath away - Paul |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
This is exquisit |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Your best? Impossible to say, the field is simply too large to judge. One of your best? Most certainly. This poem is a thing of beauty, as clear a window into your own spirit, as I have seen. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I am singing again with the youth of loud exuberance and my opera pleases me. I definitely think this beautiful expression of romance is one of your best. I particularly love these lines of self-celebration... fantastic work!! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Dear Martie, I wrote something of the consummation of your skills, only to have it dissappear. In my opinion, I view this to be art in its' purest form. Please sculpt, paint, draw,write,act,sing,dance, and by any and all means, write us another. Doc |
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matthew hallman Junior Member
since 2007-07-04
Posts 10 |
WoW... thats all i can say |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Ahhhh ... Martie! The images you bring to mind through your words are exquisite as always. To read you ... is such a treat to my senses. Much enjoyed. ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Gosh dear one, where have I been hiding you for about the past year? Sorry that I have been so neglectful... Here, have a splash of clear cool water! On me. |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh Martie, this is exquisite poetry! I doubt I've read anything so lovely here or elsewhere. Thank you sweet poet, for the graceful library treasure. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Good morning fair lady. Liz is visiting Cape Cod for the holiday weekend. Before we go to work, we're reading some fabulous poetry. YOU, of course, are first on our list. Your words are stunningly perceptive as always. Thank you from both of us.. We love you... ![]() |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
marvelous 'write'! I just had to try to bring this back to the top of the 'P.I.P.-land' queue! sustained applause!! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Martie - this is absolutely fantastic! How did I miss it? Perhaps I was meant to so I can bump it up for those who are blind like me. Really very, very, good - I'm in awe! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I have read this over many times and each time it is a fresh breath of air Your talent always amazes me And I love you Liz |
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