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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 2007-06-25 08:13 AM


(This poem was written from a challange to write an emotional poem with each line starting with one of the letters of the alaphbet...in order of course: a,b,c,d...)


Some Losses Come Harder Than Others


Already you were part of me -
blue?  pink?  it mattered not.
Carefully I held you,
deep beneath flesh,
enclosed within womb -
floating safe in my inland sea.
Gleefully I memorized
heartbeat and ultrasound;
immersing you in motherly love.

January came on hard that year
killing trees and dreams -
losing you came harder.
Mahogany stains
never washed out
of pale blue carpet -
painful reminders,
quantifying grief,
rendering me speechless.

Spring brought no new life.
Time stood still -
unremitting and relentless.
Veiled in sorrow, I
waited, wished, prayed that
X chromosome would meet
Y  - leaving
zygote in their wake.




I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S

© Copyright 2007 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-06-25 09:21 AM


Ruth, never mind the challenge, that was great all by itsself...but what you wrote about? wow...that just rips the heart open and lets the ache pour out....excellent penning....
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2 posted 2007-06-25 01:06 PM


I couldn't leave a better comment than Susan - excellent Ruth!
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3 posted 2007-06-25 01:11 PM


you always write beautifully.

enjoyed and nice style but it is hard to write for certain letters.

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4 posted 2007-06-25 06:29 PM


excellent!!
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5 posted 2007-06-25 07:13 PM


wonderful writing Ruth~~

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Robert Jordan
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6 posted 2007-06-25 07:16 PM


Ruth,

Excellent work on this subject.  Life can be hard at any age, from the very young, to the very old.  We should all help each other.

Bobby

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7 posted 2007-06-25 11:07 PM


Wow! You did a wonderful job on this challenge.
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8 posted 2007-06-26 02:50 AM


The challenge was met but the subject so sad. You wrote a great piece from any  standard. Feeling this one. martyjo
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