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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Distant are the sounds in these empty spaces that were once filled with the songs of our souls mere echoes now of what was I tilt my head, listen through the stillness to find just one strain; one note still afloat in hollowed caverns. It is silent now. Love's symphony once played there in melody so pure every chord was beautifully orchestrated a perfect harmony of two hearts joined in passionate rhapsody. A lullaby so moving it would bring me to tears and still I cry through the passing years for a song, now faded from memory with a prayer for one more dance between you and me. No more lookin' over my shoulder No more hangin' on to the past No more filling up my tomorrows With yesterday's sorrows No more lookin' over my shoulder [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (06-19-2007 09:43 AM).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my ... just lovely GentleSpirit. Beautiful phrasing throughout ... I could almost "hear" the echoes through the cavern. Really wonderful.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Kit, thanks so much. It is good to see you around these parts again. No more lookin' over my shoulder No more hangin' on to the past No more filling up my tomorrows With yesterday's sorrows No more lookin' over my shoulder {T Tritt} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (06-19-2007 09:44 AM).] |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Thanks Donna ... it's good to be here and be reading.  I enjoyed my second read too!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a tender ache I feel in this may you dance again soon |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"Distant are the sounds in these empty spaces that were once filled with the songs of our souls" The song of our souls... I can hear it now. It was done by The Carpenters: "We've Only Just Begun" Beautiful! JL What I used to do with one hand tied behind my back now requires every muscle in my body, cohesively. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...feelings so well expressed...James |
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RogueandPoet Member
since 2007-06-04
Posts 126Oregon |
I really liked this one. The "Hollowed Caverns" topic just works and the theme flows beautifully through the piece. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Read this when I posted..was in a hurry though - a meeting 10 minutes ago - Loved it! In particular the last 7 lines... j. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Donna, for what it is worth, I AM IMPRESSED! What an incredible piece of writing! Top caliber! In fact, I would like to tuck this beauty away!  btw, I hearya!  Linda |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
This reverberated in my soul. So beautiful... Thank You |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
ah gentle Donna you always write what I need |
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