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Open Poetry #40

Weary

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

0 posted 2007-06-18 09:07 AM

             “Weary”

Peace, elusive rest,
    Haven from all sorrow.
        Troubled Soul be blessed,
            no worries for tomorrow.

Nightly mists unfold,
    enshroud the weary mind
        Await the dreams of old
            in hopes they will be kind.

Dream or memory;
    both the same relation.
        Embrace eternally,
            such a strong temptation.

Sleep, be not too loud,
    to hold a mind in illusion.
        Death, be not too proud,
            to steal a Soul in confusion.

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Robert Jordan
Member

since 2007-02-07

Posts 392
Philadelphia Pa USA

1 posted 2007-06-18 01:16 PM

MoonShadow,

This is fairly good. The end rhymes are well done, and not forced.

Bobby

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

2 posted 2007-06-18 03:09 PM

a beauty to eyes and to read

enjoyed

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2007-06-18 08:01 PM

nice formatting

good theme

well done!

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

4 posted 2007-06-19 07:03 AM

  Thank you for your kind replies.

         Goodbye.

       MoonShadow

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secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

5 posted 2007-06-20 05:30 PM

most fine, powerful 'write'!

sustained applause!!

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

6 posted 2007-06-21 10:38 PM

exquisite gentle Sir Moonshadow

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2007-06-21 11:38 PM

I enjoyed your nod to Donne,
as I have done so, myself.

His works are worthy of paraphrase,
and substance, such as you gave this.

I continue to look forward
to reading more from you.

Yes, this soul is touched.

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