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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I took my left thigh in my hands and I threw it--one more step. I followed that in shuffling dragging my wound on the nigh: I stopped and praised the skies of Hell. I made each toe kiss mother earth. I used my arms as balance beams I closed my eyes and then I heard whispher of the rustling fresh upon the leaves of spring: I saw the suns in diadem there across my screening eyes: I heard the waters whistling laughing in the bottoming crashing like a bellowing as the trees applauded, tops: I gripped the rock beneath my toes I felt the slippers gripping me made of tiny green lacing thoughts between my "knows" as though there was not the crash of need taunting and bedeviling me, into an arc of back me, a thread of needling right into the eye... follow foam into the vee of the mothernet casting dancing like Mikhail (as we) standing bone in pirouette scratching stone in hard-toe hell-- with the blue eyes far away as the muscles sculpt and dwell the way that legs in want should beg and everything neglect is bells: ringing one tone off as he hoes the grounds in fallacy humming underneath his breath the flats to sharps in harmony wishing for a well, as the heavy velvet curtain falls weighted by the fringe of wing sequins became reckoning dazzled by the second string of the steam of Deus Ex damning all of us. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (06-10-2007 07:08 PM).] |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
Dear SB, enjoyed your good poem though I have never read the Book. read several times and will read again. enjoyed the poem of the kind of mixed feelings. have a nice day, my dear lady. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mea Culpa, Drauntz. I caught and corrected the error that might have caused some confusion. I intended the previous Deus X to read Deus Ex. My apologies for the error. Hope that this helps.  http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Deus_ex_machina And I appreciate your time and generosity as always. Love to you! |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
told ya that I'll come back to read. oops, title changed. Then I do not even want to guess the hint. Ah............ always love to read your poem..it has deep meanings and make me think..I may not totally get it, but I still enjoy reading it. I'll come back again to read it. hugs and hugs |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Don't give up ever. No matter how heavy or full of water and silt your boots may be, pick one up and put it in front of the other. Adagio |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Not exactly a Greek tragedy....or, is it just like one! No cavalry to the rescue this time. We have to do it ourselves. This is worth another read (confess, I've already read it three times). I like the "knows" play, btw. *hugs*....jo |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ever read something and you just know there is something there, something brilliant that you just aren't getting? When I first started reading Karen I complained to a friend just that. I knew I wasn't getting something, something so good that I was furious at my own ignorance. My friend told me that there would be times I wouldn't get it because it was that close to Karen. That made me feel better. I have the pleasure of having gotten to know the words and the woman a bit better. Sometimes I still need it spelled out for me, but I have found that that is okay because I learn. Karen, keep moving that leg...you will get to where you need to go and I am there a few steps behind if you need a hand. Love you muchly.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
you...smiles for Susan and yep, some poems are strictly catharsis and this is one of those... I was thinking about all of the clever machinery we have now--we lay willingly on slabs to enter the mouth of some machine god (MRI) and just well, all of the technology that the medical profession is very proud of, that pretty much makes their job easier, but also dethrones them as "gods". Then I got to thinking that the new god is the vile machinations of Insurance companies, and I just muttered out a poem to m'self. The story poems are for ya'll though, I promise.  ow  Confusing, this one...but then? *shrug* So were the Cathars. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
“standing bone in pirouette scratching stone in hard-toe hell-- with the blue eyes far away as the muscles sculpt and dwell” one person’s catharsis is another person’s poem the meaning of your words is mine to fix upon and I love it! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Well...darn I've missed reading you. My mind's been elsewhere, I swear, but always know you're in my heart. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
“there was not the crash of need taunting and bedeviling me, into an arc of back me, a thread of needling right into the eye...” Wow Karen. Such a beautiful meandering flow in this read, rife with wonderful imagery and lovely phrasing. I particularly loved the section I copied above. It’s great to read you. Very much enjoyed!  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...follow foam into the vee of the mothernet casting dancing like Mikhail (as we) standing bone in pirouette scratching stone in hard-toe hell-- with the blue eyes far away... Oh, when those blue eyes are so far, faw away... and still, the puppet master pulls the strings... my wayward thoughts are dancing... |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Sis, there's many times I desired the gift of style you possess, and this is one. Good ebb and flow, very conversant with a bit of finger jabbing and descriptors easily seen behind eyes. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Serenity, No complications are foreseen I've asked my good friend Forest Green who saw the "King" in full array. I wonder where he is today? I've asked dear Munda more than once , 'twould seem that I'm the biggest dunce, as good friends come and good friends go , I don't stay much in touch, yanno. Oh well, I hope this finds you good,bewildered but still in the 'hood. Doc |
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