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Love Among the Ruins (Huan Yi Challenge)
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Love Among the Ruins (Huan Yi Challenge) |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Love Among the Ruins  Maybe you see a story With no beginning Empty rooms echo Whispers haunt lost memories Gouged eyes mournful No tears left to cry Cloud-covered questions Unanswered History lost to the winds Maybe you are blind To the rainbow of stories Airing in the breeze Deaf to a melody Of children's off-key laughter Floating in the eaves Dreams nestled in old logs Hanging in suspension Unattended Family sentinel waiting Love among the ruins. ---- Alison |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, I like that. The picture is the perfect complement to the poem, and I can hear the off-key laughter. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Nan Thank you. Alison |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
awesome job with this--sometimes I find pictures distracting, I confess, but this one just enhances your work. Loved it Alison.  |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Good Alison A woman's poem I could never write it . . . John |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
grand-fine emotive ‘write’!... [wonderful photo.-image also] I LOVE lines and imagery such as: “Whispers haunt lost memories”; “the rainbow of stories Airing in the breeze...” “Love among the ruins.” and (to me) particularly wonderful is: “Cloud-covered questions Unanswered History lost to the winds...” AND: “children's ... laughter Floating in the eaves Dreams nestled in old logs Hanging in suspension Unattended” VERY serious and long-sustained applause!! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you all. I grew up in that house. A |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 well done! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
well done, challenge well met. I am straining to meet and match ya... |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
beautiful and tender yet sad. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
ah so lovely Alison "Deaf to a melody Of children's off-key laughter Floating in the eaves" |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you all for reading and sharing your thoughts. Alison |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
a beauty. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you, Drauntz -- I liked yours too -- Alison |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Alison, what a wonderful way to capture the essence of the challenge! I could almost hear the whispers and giggles in those shaky rafters, feel the energy that once filled the rooms of an abandoned home from some family's distant past. WOW! I just read your comment above, that you grew up in that house! This makes the write all the more powerful, as it is an intimate portrait. I especially liked the children's "off-key laughter" image. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you, MidniteSun. It was a postscript that I almost did not share. I am thrilled that you liked this poem -- it has a lot of 'me' in it. You seem like a kindred spirit ~ must be the AK connection. A |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Lovely write, Alison. Much enjoyed! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you, honeybunch. Alison |
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