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Say We instead of I
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Say We instead of I |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Say We instead of I I’ve learned to say we instead of I To say hello instead of good-bye I’ve changed my frown into a smile And my guile to a pleasant wile I have learned to be a child again And to wend within their greener glen I’ve stopped my rush of growing up The maddening push to fill my cup No longer feel I’ll never die Or that the life I’ve lived a lie I know I cannot be a dove But still, can let myself be love I’ve learned that those that have the least Often savor the greatest feast And friend is those that can forgive And pass the path of blind misgive Yet still I stand a precipice And feel the chill of nakedness |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful Sy. It speaks of the wisdom that only the years can bring, if we let them. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, You got that we right, thank you dear. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
When we are kids, we want to hurry up and get grown. Then, once we get there, we wish we were kids again. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
mais oui...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
SmartChick I remember that.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine Mais oui  |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
Sey, loved the poem, but an interesting thought, if you actually change 'loved' for 'love' I think it would do you justice. (not just for rhyming reasons, it seems to me to change the entire nature of the work in a way I think does what I know of you credit) Ivor |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
sir, another beautiful poem. This poem is the sister of your "All Change". truly another good one. again a lesson of life. "Yet still I stand a precipice And feel the chill of nakedness"..you have a very beautiful soul, Sir. Have a wonderful evening, Sir Tabin! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ivor, "love" it is, thank you friend. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Drauntz And you my friend have a very large one. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"I’ve learned that those that have the least Often savor the greatest feast" such wisdom Sir Sy you must have been there |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
You know, you show so much heart and style in your poetry. I love reading your words. Yep, I do. Alison |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
your words show that you are "love"...  M |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
no matter what we think and feel, somewhere it still is slightly uncertain and we have inner doubts...just human nature.... |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Yo Seymour, I’ll buy into saying we instead of I. However, I’ll respectfully pass on becoming a child again. Childhood was the pits for everyone. You don't really want to go there. Bobby |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, T-Man! You are beautiful in your nakedness! You learn. You write. We learn.  Earth Angel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady, Yes I've been there. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
aziza I appreciate, thank you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Maureen, You are a dear. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus Yes just human nature. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Robert, LOL not physically. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Earth Angel And you watch over me. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice indeed...James |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you James. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
very fine, enjoyable 'write'! applause! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
secondhanddreampoet Thank you my friend. |
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gmcooper Junior Member
since 2007-05-30
Posts 47 |
This is a very reflective write and I can tell you gave it a great deal of thought/depth. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 now go back and count how many times you used "I"  an enjoyable read, dear Sy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
gmcooper Thank you for your kind reply. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Midnitesun How an you have one without the other. LOL |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sy, I see why there are so many posts on this one....it's just great! I especially liked the verse about friends. *hugs*...jo |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
thank you for a place we can feel a smile |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
jo, Thank you my friend. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MGROVES Thank you for making me smile. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your poems are always fantastic... but this one contains so much of you and the man you are... making it even more beautiful than usual! *S* |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
your always a pleasure to read~ My spirit will rise |
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