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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. The general level In conversation is as usual With an acquired respect For what isn’t said There’s bread and cheese Beer and wine A great deal of simply milling around Country music on a radio playing loud At these extended family gatherings There’s a certain amount of civil gaiety That always controls the moods Then eventually it’s time To bring in the chairs As fireflies begin to glow Above the lawn Even the children Are tired and ready for bed With dishes of food Wrapped in plastic and aluminum foil Everyone turns for their cars It was a fine Kind way to spend the day Only you weren’t there . |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Everybody was tired but John was inspired! On Summer eves the longing increases ... Beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
How can you just touch human feelings like this accuracy?!!! everyone with a lost one will be like this. every single one will be like this. Kathy is feeling just like this today. and all the families with lost ones in the war, in the shooting, will know the feelings. I know it too. Your poems have a power to shake people's emotions. |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
Huan, Ah I can just see it now. We used to have those same gatherings when I was young. You constructed this so vividly. Awesome job! quatro |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It was a fine Kind way to spend the day Only you weren’t there This goes straight to my heart... in part because our family reunion would have been next week... but we've lost so many, we're losing that, too. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
John I have been a quiet fan of your poetry for some time now. Honestly, I haven't written as anything I thought to say simply sounded shallow to me. But, this poem really got to me. It hit the old heart strings. I have been in those gatherings - as a child and an adult. It's like you took a photograph of family gatherings all over the world and put it to words. Sometimes, I feel lonely in the crowd when I don't see the right face. Anyway, thank you for the words, the poems and the 'word photographs' you share with us all. Alison |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thank you all, Especially you Alison; it's always good to hear from those in the shadows. Thanks again John |
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