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The One Act Grecian Traveling Show |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Now I know just what I did thank you love you showed me this: Apologies aside are naught I dropped my bombs from flame and caught innocents within my burn it matters not the incidence and there cannot be recompense-- not in this life nor the next-- take it--I've a small, small head to match my little neck. [aside to executioner:] "I forgive you, yes." Blunt the lights to dark and then the strings commence the toppling fluid and meandering like a gypsy's wedding skirt: proud with blood of speckling [strike the gong just once] and sing: "Ave Ave" chorus winged in obligation to the plight: on the wires, hovering faces painted grimace white with tears in black of rivering mourning "what was done was right." The angels wept, the liars cried-- and so it was, the day I died-- all of this, the truth that I wrote in blood drank by the sand: They should have chopped my hands. I say--they should have chopped my hands. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
No never lose your hands! You need those to type... Keep your head and spoof them off and you will come out ahead of the game... It is just a game you know.... martyjo |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
oh, take my soul. I can't endure the physical pain. love to read something like this. [This message has been edited by Drauntz (04-24-2007 07:53 PM).] |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
yes those last two lines! amazing |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this is some fantastic writing...calculated undercurrents that resound, personal betrayal, in the nature of life's lies and dissappointments...you always, always offer a series of human touch to the echoes within |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I appreciate you all reading my rather dark muse on the loss of my own head.  thank you And um, the title? Obviously, although there are some who would buy tickets to such a show, a literal beheading could only be a one time only deal. But I am living proof that it is entirely possible to lose one's mind, over and over and over...  The Grecian bit was "a nod" to the Greek Philosophers.  |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Love this. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
The wonder of losing one's head over and over and over is that it is living proof that one can regain one's head over and over and over - even when it seems impossible. I love the poem and its brilliance and its play format and its honesty and its taking responsibility and its contrition written in blood. However, with regard to the wonderful and shiver-sensitive lines of: I dropped my bombs from flame and caught innocents within my burn it matters not the incidence and there cannot be recompense-- not in this life nor the next-- - I don't agree about there not being recompense. There is always possibility of that, though not necessarily of the expected kind. - nor do I agree with "what was done (the execution) was right". What would we all do without Serenity Blaze or Karen or the fusion of the two? And, thank goodness they didn't chop your hands! And, no, they shouldn't have. Some people would say, "Sorry". Karen writes "The One Act Grecian Traveling Show"! Wow! - Owl |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
even when metaphorical, you walk us through the picture and let us touch and feel the texture of your words...  awesome. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Read it twice, loved it both times... Question? Does a head bounce when it falls?? That part's always hidden in the movies... Sorry if that question seems belittling to this wonderful write. . . but I've always wondered. jimmy |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Jimmy's response and question made me laugh~~ darn you write so serious most days (even if you don't think this so) I smiled because I understand...and am glad you have your hands AND head to entertain us  M |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 If I could express one word so that Mighty Muse would be world renowned...I imagine it would be: Submit. [In all the best of the only way...] Yes, I love you, too. |
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