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Lift Every Rock
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Lift Every Rock |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite: Lift Every Rock I often sit and poke my mind To lift some mental rock to find The treasure of an indiscreet A gem perhaps not quite complete Each shadow does a dance for me Of hidden thoughts that’s brewed a tea And when I sip this potions wet It often places me in debt A fallow field is good to know Once rested of a constant grow It wields a power like a flower And yields an essence of an hour And I am off to phantoms rook To take a second longer look To dig me up a treasure mart That’s buried there within my heart There’s magic in our older age Just gauge once more its mellow stage |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
magic indeed we should all lift more rocks along the way  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing, Thank you dear for the read and comment. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
very lovely. and a very interesting thought about the rock in the mind. Sir, do you mean that certian area that is not developed at all? you might find that under one rock is your sky diving desire, another could be a rock climber, or ballet dancer or something fancier than that. Keep digging and fliping. but we shall not loss a wonderful poet. enjoyed as always. have good night, Sir Tabin. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Drauntz Exactly and thank you for the read and reply. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"There’s magic in our older age Just gauge once more its mellow stage" lift every rock and sing... this is lovely magic Sir Sy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady Thank you my dear for the read and quote. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Think I'll take a little venture to phatom's rook myself! Enjoyed this, Sy.  ....jo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you iliana. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
There's definitely magic in your words, my friend... and they're ageless/timeless... wonderful! *S* |
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The_Nameless_One Member
since 2007-01-20
Posts 165Missouri |
finally able to get back on here again this was a great first read today very nice seymour this one had me thinking. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Thank you sweetie for the kind words.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
The_Nameless_One Thank you for the read and comment. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Seymour ... I have missed your fine words, my friend! Hello there! Reading this was like bringing a lovely melody to my mind - thank you for the wonderful flow and tempo - you are always a treat for me to read. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit McCallum Can't tell you how happy I was to see your comment. I hope everything is going well with you. Be well and thank you for remembering me. |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ A fallow field is good to know Once rested of a constant grow It wields a power like a flower And yields an essence of an hour ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Seymour, Your words are refreshing and stand out like a meadow flower in a fallow field. It is the 'resting' of the constant grow that sometimes is necessary for the magic of onboard knowledge to subconciously grow within one's mind to produce the power you so wisely show in your verse. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ There’s magic in our older age Just gauge once more its mellow stage ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ All who choose to drink of your cup will have their thirst quenched... Ivor |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ivor Thank you so much for your understanding and wonderful comment. I value your friendship. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, Sir T ~ Please continue to poke your mind, for in doing so, you poke mine through the poems your write!  There are treasures to be found under dem dare rocks! Rock on! luvsya! EA |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
yup, the gains from our choices, our independence, and along comes the stripping of innocence, yet, the flowers of maturity...splendid read |
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MannyNelemi New Member
since 2007-04-27
Posts 9Houston |
thats a nice poem! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MannyNelemi Thank you for the recognition. |
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L. Ottanio Junior Member
since 2007-04-17
Posts 27Connecticut, USA |
new here... but found the poem most fascinating... on how you used everyday words to speak so loud about life and the after-effects of living it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ottanio That has always been my aim. Thank you. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ You mellow to perfection~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge Thank you sweetie.  |
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