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Open Poetry #40

Naive entities

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2007-04-01 03:15 PM

I’ve pulled down the sky;
there never are vows
forever to be unbroken
when blue mixes with brown
and alienates humanity
from celestial space.

Oh, see, see, naive entities
huddled in grandiose schemes
of love, light, eternal life,
but twiddle the thumbs
there is no crumb
of unquestionable evidence.

So dastardly deeds beget your deeds
and lovers beget new loves;
salvation of mind no longer applies
when sky is lying on ground.

Paddle, paddle, we paddle canoes
each one in this marshy swamp
because I am the woman, you the man,
and there never is proof of soul.

But reject the soul, beget regret
and “bless you, my son, you sinned”
a fable of pure convenience
to appease the paddlers, you see?

Helen / 1 April 2007

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2007-04-01 05:17 PM

Hi, Honey!

Fascinating, metaphorical writing! ~ and as always, merits a read or two!

Lovin' hug,
Linda

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2007-04-01 06:16 PM

Again some great food for thought.

When we look deep into our eyes or someone else's eyes, we can't but welcome the soul.

Your piece made me think of Eric's "Original sin". Here is the link (I am sure Eric doesn't mind me posting it):
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Love,
Margherita

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