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Juju
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In your dreams

0 posted 2013-10-10 09:34 PM


Simple Things

Any day now
The World will change
And the distance between you and me
Will fold time and space
Until the wrinkles
Blur those Lines
You so firmly drew in the sand

And we weren't even children...

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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Margherita
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1 posted 2013-12-15 05:45 AM


Very beautiful, dear Juju. It touches my heart.

Love,
Margherita

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2 posted 2013-12-23 08:00 PM


I really found this poem very touching.

Trillium

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Jack Napes
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3 posted 2014-02-22 05:58 PM


I'm interpreting the thread starter as some form of "challenge".

If so, what's the challenge?

It's all coming back to me now. The last thing I remember being told is, "keep going until you reach the end of the circle".

Rex Allen McCoy
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4 posted 2015-03-13 04:21 PM


to me, this reads so sadly... full of wonderful thought and well chosen lines.

enjoyed
Rex

Vincent
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5 posted 2015-03-22 01:47 PM


sounds like a ending to me, this is how it once was..the rules vanished.  just my thought.
jjote
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6 posted 2015-05-08 12:10 PM


lovely and sad..but what's the challenge? what about a poem a day, any genre.
Ticklefingers
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7 posted 2015-10-08 01:09 PM


Simple, yet soft and warm as sun-baked sand.

Sand...the original 'etch-a-sketch'.

(perhaps the 'challenge' was the poet's own to metaphorically relate her feelings in words.)


88's friend    

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

Juju
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8 posted 2015-12-13 08:51 PM


Hello. One of our late poets had a poetry challenge to write a poem about loving some one who not as smart as you. Essentially I wrote about the alienation of not being understood by the person you love. The terror of knowing where they come from, but they will never know you.
Bluesy Socrateaser
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9 posted 2016-09-10 08:36 PM


I don't recall the poet or the poem, but any union that equates love with intelligence is doomed in my opinion. If one is 'inferior' to the other and  admires the "other", that's one thing and I'm certain it happens all the time.

That "opposites attract" is better left to traditional gender distinctions and 'overnight sensations', not to the planting and cultivation of love.

...just bein' Bluesy

Juju
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10 posted 2016-12-02 01:37 AM


In the challenge forum is where this challenge is. So my poem was not about me loving some one stupider then me, but rather the frustration of being in love with someone who feels above you. You can't control who you love or how they feel about you. Which is why I'm a poet and not a self help expert.
Forlorn Angel
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11 posted 2020-04-13 03:50 PM


Love your style. Much like mine. Beautiful poem. I need to learn to add more beauty to my pen.
Temptress
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12 posted 2020-06-10 11:46 PM


I'm giving this one a very long deep sigh.
I love the imagery here.


"Maybe that's the way I should go
Straight into the mouth of the unknown"

Shinedown

johnthecat
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13 posted 2021-04-07 11:59 AM


Your poem poses so many questions to me. I'm not sure I'll ever know the answers and I'm quickly running out of time

Thank you for writing it.

May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out.

Irish proverb

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