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Simple Things -"Write a poem Challenge" |
Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Simple Things Any day now The World will change And the distance between you and me Will fold time and space Until the wrinkles Blur those Lines You so firmly drew in the sand And we weren't even children... Juju -Juju |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very beautiful, dear Juju. It touches my heart. Love, Margherita |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
I really found this poem very touching. Trillium Betty Lou Hebert |
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Jack Napes Member
since 2014-02-22
Posts 290Phaedra's Womb |
I'm interpreting the thread starter as some form of "challenge". If so, what's the challenge? It's all coming back to me now. The last thing I remember being told is, "keep going until you reach the end of the circle". |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
to me, this reads so sadly... full of wonderful thought and well chosen lines. enjoyed Rex |
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Vincent Member
since 2007-02-03
Posts 52 |
sounds like a ending to me, this is how it once was..the rules vanished. just my thought. |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
lovely and sad..but what's the challenge? what about a poem a day, any genre. |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
Simple, yet soft and warm as sun-baked sand. Sand...the original 'etch-a-sketch'. (perhaps the 'challenge' was the poet's own to metaphorically relate her feelings in words.) 88's friend She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Hello. One of our late poets had a poetry challenge to write a poem about loving some one who not as smart as you. Essentially I wrote about the alienation of not being understood by the person you love. The terror of knowing where they come from, but they will never know you. |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
I don't recall the poet or the poem, but any union that equates love with intelligence is doomed in my opinion. If one is 'inferior' to the other and admires the "other", that's one thing and I'm certain it happens all the time. That "opposites attract" is better left to traditional gender distinctions and 'overnight sensations', not to the planting and cultivation of love. ...just bein' Bluesy |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
In the challenge forum is where this challenge is. So my poem was not about me loving some one stupider then me, but rather the frustration of being in love with someone who feels above you. You can't control who you love or how they feel about you. Which is why I'm a poet and not a self help expert. |
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Forlorn Angel Member Posts 143 |
Love your style. Much like mine. Beautiful poem. I need to learn to add more beauty to my pen. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I'm giving this one a very long deep sigh. I love the imagery here.
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johnthecat Junior Member Posts 18 England |
Your poem poses so many questions to me. I'm not sure I'll ever know the answers and I'm quickly running out of time Thank you for writing it. May your roof never fall in and those beneath it never fall out. |
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