Sam's Fish-Tale- (Triolet)

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Sam's Fish-Tale- (Triolet)

dwgpoet
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since 2007-03-05

Posts 122
FL, USA

0 posted 2007-06-01 10:50 PM

that Monday, They swam through Sam’s oceans
heeding lessons, "Stay far from Light."
By Thursday, foreplay seized notions,
that Monday, they swam through Sam's oceans.
And to the Light of Sam's potions,
the chum bridge seemed to taste so right.
Last Monday, They swam through Sam's oceans
heeding outcome, "Fish die in Light."

GreenPeace fish-cops arrive too late.

PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30

Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon

1 posted 2007-06-02 04:50 AM

Very nice. I like it. I'm not good at poetry rating or critiquing as I couldn't tell you the difference between iambic pentameter or two cups of oat flour. I just know what I like and can only tell you that I like this.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2007-06-02 11:43 AM

This is a fun read. Joyce

dwgpoet
Member

since 2007-03-05

Posts 122
FL, USA

3 posted 2007-06-13 03:33 AM

Thank You, PhaerieChild

and Thank You Joyce Johnson.

This Triolet is actually a shortened condensation
of a very long Sestina "Sam's Fish Tale- (Sestina)"

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