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Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-06-23 12:21 PM

on the side of the road,
a young man is sitting on the curb.

his hair is long and knotted,
his smile not so white.
his over coat is battered,
and he never speaks his mind.

he just sits on his curb,
watching the men in suits talk on thier phones.
with the angery words of politics,
it makes him glad hes not a drone.

he has no worldly possesions,
just his dirty clothes and his old guitar.

its an old harmony guitar,
with surprisingly no missing strings.
he always keeps it in tune.
he always lets it ring.

he doesnt want your pity,
he just wants your change.
so that he can change his strings,
if one may just break.

he doesnt mind your stares,
because hes not ashamed of who he is.
he knows he is poor and homeless,
he knows he has no kids.
but it hurts him the most,
when you forget that he lives and breathes.
when you think your better than him,
because you have somewhere to sleep.

now its not right and its not fair
the way these things pan out.
but dont forget that all people feel,
even though you may have doubts.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2007-06-23 12:27 PM

I have no doubts that all things living feel...everyone should try to treat others with common respect....

I really really liked this a lot

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

2 posted 2007-06-23 12:33 PM

Wow... I'm in total awe. When you said this wasn't like anything you'd ever written before, I didn't expect. This is... breathtaking. Seriously.

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

Alaina
Member

since 2007-06-16

Posts 106

3 posted 2007-06-23 12:45 PM

this was really great..it told a story that was easy to visualize. i really liked it

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

4 posted 2007-06-23 08:20 PM

wow this is what me and my friends who read my poetry call story poems. yours was breathtaking.they are always some of my favorties.

-Red

and if i had to choose between the whole world and you- there would be no competition

-Amanda Ann (my best friend)

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

5 posted 2007-06-26 06:38 PM

it was an amazing poem and it actually reminds me of a country sdong i heard however i forget the songs title
good job though

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

6 posted 2007-07-01 05:31 PM

So true my friend, so true

Nice poem.

Jezzika
Member

since 2005-01-05

Posts 154
work

7 posted 2007-07-02 12:39 PM

This was great...made me sad though...so many people think they are above other people in life... and in turn say hateful things...its so stupid...
AMAZING POEM!!!!

One trillion dollars could buy a heart a soul ~ Anti-Flag

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

8 posted 2007-07-02 05:59 AM

This is a story that is so true, its sad how many people can't understand that by being cruel it makes them weak. This is a really great poem because it really tells a story. I like long poems and story poems personally because i tend to write long pieces. You are one of my favorite writers here even though I'm often not here, each time I come back your poetry stays and its always good

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