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Words Loose |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
*this is a painful memory of something that once was for me. but i wanted you all to know i can write something that's not morbid and sad. i was once very happy. once . . . this came from the bottom of my heart and collected the rest of my soul on the way out. i gave over my entire self and was mortally wounded for it. remember that when your commenting on this please. Words Loose It’s really not fair, that I hunger for you; your pull wildly taking me in While you seem immune to any affect I might have upon you yourself I’m intoxicated by sheer thought of speaking with you, it’s almost too much My heart beats like never before, the wild beat of adrenaline in my blood stream It would kill me if I didn’t have to live, to live to see you one more day It so excites me that I suddenly forgot to breathe for the very first time Feeling almost right, forgetting to breathe, a hint of hysteria on the edge Getting sick from the emotion, but wanting to be sick forever, so unfair to me I suck in air, as I almost explode from the feeling that takes me higher than a bird There is hardly anything more lovely than you speaking my name Exasperation from this appraisal is what I’m expecting, but you’ll never read Because I couldn’t bear to bare you my soul- not now, not just yet love You say you love me more, but I hardly think you could, it seems impossible For I love you too much, much to much for words to dent the extreme of it I feel almost silly, but then who cares but me, and I don’t, no I don’t at all I feel I’m always waiting for you- my love addiction, and I am addicted- irrevocably Sometimes I’m frightened, scared of letting myself be given over to you like this A great deal of trust, faith in your goodness, keeps me from severing these feelings It physically, by way of emotional pain, hurts me when I find you gone I can’t go numb, no, not any more, that pathway is sealed tight, gone is the door But I wonder if you know what you’re getting into, you seem to think forever is short If it’s too long the pain will last an eternity for me, because I’ve given over too much Just promise me; just promise me, that you’ll be kind if you’re done with me Just promise to leave me as whole as possible, as I will have lost my better half to you Inigo Montoya: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to kill you. |
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Alaina Member
since 2007-06-16
Posts 106 |
first off, i just want to say that i'm very sorry you were hurt so badly. I loved "I couldn’t bear to bare you my soul" and "Just promise to leave me as whole as possible, as I will have lost my better half to you" Those two parts really made me think. They can definitely be interpreted in many different ways. Nice work |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
i know how that is. great work of words though. i loved it to death. |
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jayjara Member
since 2007-05-02
Posts 90Florida |
I don't know, I seem to admire your dark poetry better. Everything happens for a reason. -J |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
i was stunned silent it was a gogeous poem and i know how that feels in my own little way great write again it was just lovely |
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