Short and Sweet (brutal contradictions)

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Short and Sweet (brutal contradictions)

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-06-17 10:56 PM

this is a poem that makes sense in its own way. the "brutal contradictions" of burning to water so fast is kinda wierd....but if it were you in either situation, you would be realy screwed.

can you see it?
i am burning now.
its a blaze of admiration,
without whens, whys, and hows.

its growing bigger,
as i am growing weak.
im a fish in an aquarium,
but the waters starting to leak.

[This message has been edited by Clockwork_Orange (06-18-2007 12:31 AM).]

WaterFairy103
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since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

1 posted 2007-06-18 01:53 AM

Wow, very good. Made me wonder what it was about, which is a sign of good poetry, when it makes someone think. Excellent job, as usual!

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-06-18 07:57 AM

ummm i take it that you've been thinking of fish and fire- odd couple.

-Red

Inigo Montoya: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to kill you.
Westley: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to die.

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

3 posted 2007-06-18 11:27 PM

it was very good and in its odd way made soo much sense all at once

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