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Teen Poetry #8

you and me

Alaina
Member

since 2007-06-16

Posts 106

0 posted 2007-06-17 10:20 AM

You and me
Let's break the sound barrier.
I want to be inside
of your heart
To see how you feel
When I'm not around.

You and me
Let's build our own paradise.
There's no one
to distract us
from what we desire.

You and me
Let's drift into outer space,
into our own galaxy.
We'll fall out of this
terrible world,
and never have to look back
at what it was like
before we found each other.

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

1 posted 2007-06-17 01:13 PM

very nice. the fist line being repeated usually gets on my nerves but it didnt at all this time. you put this piece together quite nicly and it turned out well. good job.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-06-17 03:32 PM

loved this part

I want to be inside
of your heart
To see how you feel
When I'm not around.

nice job, it was very good

-Red

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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