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So we can fall
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So we can fall |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
yet another poem written, of what you've done, you put down the knife, and grabbed hold of the gun, you've shot me good, you've shot me hard, hitting my chest, when i let down my guard, it's just pain beneath us all, leaving room so we can fall, you come home and treat us like dirt, you've caused so much pain, so much hurt, when it's done i'll get you back well, you'll lay down your head and run like hell, i won't remember you, didn't you always tell, my sister, my mother, and I to not dwell, you're just pain beneath us all, leaving room so we can fall. A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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krazy 4 her Junior Member
since 2006-09-14
Posts 38Your parent's front porch |
Dad? That's what it sounds like. Very good. I myself have two mothers... and a dad that's not really a dad, just a sperm donor. Don't you dare laugh at me!! *sticks out tongue* Whatever. I loved this poem, but then again I loved all of your stuff! |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
well.... acually it's my mom's temperary bfd haha i wouldn't laugh at you either then who would give me such nice replies to my poem:P thanx krazy:P  hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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shattered-smiles Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 247inside the shadows |
Hunnie, this is really good! I can see the point you're coming from and I love how you put the words so beautifully down on the page. It feels like you have captured the scenario so well. |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Great work hunnie! You have great talent! Acctualy you've given me some ideas on what to improve in my poetry. Thanks "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
:S I wrote that haha wow that wuz soo long ago:P:P thank you both for your replies Krysti |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
oh i've missed your stuff. my end is crazy right now so i haven't been posting, but you know i always stop to read a Krysti piece. -Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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Jaki H Member
since 2008-01-19
Posts 232NJ, USA |
really good!!!! i like it!!! |
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