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Teen Poetry #8

Sitting on a swing

gozaggss
Junior Member

since 2006-04-26

Posts 33

0 posted 2007-05-01 10:17 PM

There’s something therapeutic about sitting on a swing
Something magically happy, that makes me want to sing
Because in that seat you’re a kid once more
Toys and laughs. Lisper socks on hardwood floor
These kids don’t care about bills or taxes
No need for vacation. Never seen a kid who ever relaxes
I wish I was a kid again, free without a care
But the truth of it all just surely isn’t fair
There are no time machines or elixir of youth
Just lies and smokescreens, to mask the vile truth
Life isn’t fun and games, learn to know this
It’s just one long fall. A void, stark abyss
And just before you feel the sharp needle sting
You think back. How nice it would be to sit upon a swing

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

1 posted 2007-05-26 08:31 AM

Ain't that the truth...
Yeah, growing up sucks but then it rocks in a way...
I don't understand fully what I'm saying...
Anyway, Good write. Hope to see more form you.

stormdancer
Junior Member

since 2007-05-10

Posts 31
state of confustion

2 posted 2007-05-26 11:17 PM

I like how you lead the reader along to think it was about a swing. In a way it was.

TayJay01
New Member

since 2007-04-24

Posts 9

3 posted 2007-05-27 03:25 PM

really good write
i liked the first line
it was the best

Tinsel
Junior Member

since 2007-06-04

Posts 36
UK

4 posted 2007-06-04 02:42 PM

So, so true. The same goes for climbing trees and swinging upside down on monkey bars (although as I have learned, the mothers do give you strange looks if you do this at the local primary school. Particularly in a skirt.)
Anyways, great poem.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

5 posted 2007-06-05 01:10 AM

yah the truth the cold hard bitter truth wish I was a kid again ahh so carefree.. tx for sharing great poem
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

6 posted 2007-06-06 02:40 PM

Aw to be a kid again.

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