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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain 
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dont remember my face or my soft fingers trace dont remember my voice or my hearts hurting choice dont remember my eyes or all the lies dont remember my smile or any of the trials dont remember my hair or the blooming roses fair dont remember my smell or how our love fell just remember one thing and one thing only while your moving on my heart lies breaking and you're gone. ~missy |
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Tinsel Junior Member
since 2007-06-04
Posts 36UK |
I really liked that poem. For constructive criticism -this really has nothing to do with the poem, cos it was ace- just thought I'd mention that where to words have been joined together, such as "do" and "not" in "don't" there is an aposotrophe where the missing letter is. |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
thanks for the reply tinsel! Yes, i wrote it on notepad and i never go through and edit my poetry, so i just pasted it on here and didn't think about it.. sorry! ~missy |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
notepad really? that is what I do  I really liked this it was so cute I can realte so well too.hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
lol yes really! thats always what i do.. ha ha.. :] well thanks for the replies! GB<>< glad y'all liked it ~missy |
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