Teen Poetry #8 |
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Empty Corridors |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
A lone figure runs Down empty corridors Haggard steps ring out loud Breath coming out in gasps Dark unlit shadows Are her domain Dressed in silver The only lightness in a sea of dark Running from all of being Going towards destiny Foot catches on an upturned stone Bites her lip in a frozen cry Not allowed to make noise In her untouched realms Her body falls on the cold floor She gets up in a slowness of motion To run again down the aisles of dark She runs always running down Empty corridors Looking for a sign of other existence Though knowing there will be none Shadows, darkness, home of the forgotten A space in which she is Where all the lost souls come home To forever run the empty corridors Running never to stop Knowing what her fate is Too far gone in what used to be a fable She immersed herself in her own lies To be trapped in empty corridors. ******* sorry this is probaly not that good. looking over it i dont think its that good. it just came i just wrote it. but please tell me how i can do better i want to really try to get better |
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nostalgic*pride Member
since 2006-08-23
Posts 122NowhereVille |
No no no no, I like this poem. I think the ending is very mysterious, where not too much is given away, but you know what the emotions must be like. Really, I like it. |
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