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An Unsafe Continuing
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An Unsafe Continuing |
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nostalgic*pride Member
since 2006-08-23
Posts 122NowhereVille |
She took a walk one night Before the sun could raise its head When the moon was shining bright And the world was safe in bed Looking out across the field She caught a glimpse of her boy His head bowed in silence Sucked of all joy No, she didn't want to disturb him So she watched from a far Beautiful was this boy she loved And then she saw his scars He was bruised and broken As he laid there to die Her heart called out to him When she heard this cry "I'll see you 'round the bend When I finally shed this pain Sorry I have to go But I'm going insane!" She took a walk last Sunday Headed to the grave She loved him more than anything Now she’ll never be the same Looking apon his tombstone She trembles with the wind It’s ironic how the good loose their life And the others watch it end She must look so calm And ready to get back to her life But underneath all her words She will never again be alright Because she’s lost the only thing That ever mattered at all And now she makes her final choice And cries out to me as she falls "I'll see you 'round the bend When I finally shed this pain Sorry I have to go But I'm going insane!" I took a walk this morning Remembering that night And how she chose to leave me But still can haunt my life Staring out across the sea I can't help but shed these tears My head is bowed in reverence Trying to banish all my fears I know I must seem nonchalant With iron bars around my soul So confident in my own skin But the truth is not what’s told I am weak and bloody Ready to just lie here and die My heart breaks into a thousand pieces As I scream out my last cry "I'll see you 'round the bend When I finally shed this pain Sorry I have to go But I'm going insane!" |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
wow!!!! it reminded me of like maybe the idea of like the slaves in america when bad people whipped some of the slaves. just the first part and the second part makes me think of its like a dream\fairy tale, except no happy ending. it was intense but relaxed. but very good. im rambling. it was kinda long but i liked it. i like long poems and i write them so ya. |
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xpyrox04x New Member
since 2006-06-28
Posts 7 |
wow, that brought tears to my eyes. That is very well written, may i ask thougth was it inspired by a real life experience, or that of another person? Its packed full of emotion, so many different ones i can barely count them, but i really enjoyed reading it, you really do shed a new light on life with stuff like that, ihope i see more of your stuff in future |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
wow that was like the best poem i have ever read by you or anyone  this was amazing very emotional writeluv from hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Yes, this poem is so beautiful and sad to read! I loved this one though; It's kind of ironic, you know? I love the sad poems... Don't change anything on this one, in fact if you do I will call in the change nothing protestors to protest! "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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nostalgic*pride Member
since 2006-08-23
Posts 122NowhereVille |
Hey, you can't call on them! I AM one of them!! Lol, I'd be... protesting for me not to change a poem that I already changed because I'm protesting myself... whatever. Lol. Thanks you guys for the comments!! |
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krazy 4 her Junior Member
since 2006-09-14
Posts 38Your parent's front porch |
Haley, where have you been hiding this talent? Because it certainly doesn't show in Language Arts. Hehe, small joke. Really, this is excellent. |
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