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Red And White Stripes Never Looked More Beautiful
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Red And White Stripes Never Looked More Beautiful |
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lemonraindrops Junior Member
since 2007-01-28
Posts 19 |
Red and White Stripes Never Looked More Beautiful Daddy on this Christmas I want to give you something more More than just a hug and kiss But that's all I can afford Daddy you work so hard for us Just to get us through And no matter what I get this Christmas Daddy I love you I'll hang our stockings on the wall One for you and one for me I know that we can't fill them But there's something I want you to see On Christmas Eve she tiptoes To the wall by the window pane And inside Daddy's stocking She hides a candy cane In the morning she wakes him joyously And finds a small surprise Daddy held out a little doll It was the most that he could buy She gasped with sheer delight And gave his neck a hug Then she took his hand And gave it a little tug She brought him to the far wall And he pulled out the candy cane From deep inside his stocking Beside the window pane Daddy, she said in a tiny voice I saved it just for you When the teacher passed out candy I knew just what to do I saved the best piece and ran right home So I could hide it away I wanted you to have a gift On this Christmas Day When I put it in your stocking I blew a kiss in too And when I saw a shooting star I left the wish for you So I hope you like it Daddy This gift to you from me Because Daddy you're the greatest And you're all I'll ever need Elyse |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
"And when I saw a shooting star I left the wish for you"... I think this is the best line in a poem of awesome lines. It made my heart skip a little, thinking of that little girl telling her Daddy that. What a fabuous picture this paints for me.  Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
awe your poems are soooo sad/sweet..... hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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*Swing_Life_Away* Junior Member
since 2006-12-22
Posts 10UK |
so sweet, so sad, i loved it. i personally cant relate to it but im sure alot of other people in the world can. its really good well done  xxx |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elyse~ This is absolutely WONDERFUL~ Told from a tender heart ... you make me feel proud to hold hands with such a great young poetess~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
it was simply beautiful. i know christmases a little like that. they are the most cherished ones of all. "When I put it in your stocking I blew a kiss in too" - my favorite lines. you did lovely. "Love is when you tell a guy you like his shirt, then he wears it |
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lemonraindrops Junior Member
since 2007-01-28
Posts 19 |
Thank you so very much everyone! My poetry thrives on your comments and thoughts Much, much appreciated. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
wow.. this is my favorite.. I love it.. the imagery, the form, everything. It made my teary-eyed. Beautifl. Heather ps-going in my library! Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
I liked it was very cute. I loved the feeling and all the lines. Good job |
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chiLanta Junior Member
since 2006-12-01
Posts 47 |
put tears is my eyes i loved it well put togeather |
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lemonraindrops Junior Member
since 2007-01-28
Posts 19 |
Thanks again all! Much love! "I've got a jar of dirrr-rrt! I've got a jar of dirrr-rrt! And do you know what's IN my jar of dirt?" |
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