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Door Number One
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lemonraindrops Junior Member
since 2007-01-28
Posts 19 |
Door Number One Spent my whole life Choosing door number three Results good enough So far as I could see Never took a chance To open a new door Saw two more options But chose to ignore Blinded by prizes In turn were all fake But I was to stupid To fix my mistake Quick glance around Door one and door two There for so long Never hidden from view Again on this stage Faced with decision I hear from afar Some sort of collision And door number two Slammed and locked tight Hiding its contents Forever from sight Clocks tick loudly Losing time to decide Quickly now quickly Or another endless ride Close my eyes slowly Speak the number aloud A drum roll please A roar from the crowd A brand new journey A life just begun Let's see what's behind Door number one Elyse |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Yeah you know I love this one because it is you! You're always willing to open those new doors and see what they hold!  Ok I'm off to the other forums where I post (once a year or so LOL) and do some reading there ~~ check your inbox I left you a message when I saw you were online! Love ya Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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lemonraindrops Junior Member
since 2007-01-28
Posts 19 |
Ooh thankies!! |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Tell the reader a bit more about whats in the doors make it solid. Right now its bits and pieces here and there. Try tying it up more. |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
I like the idea of this door Lemon. Of these doors acually. Reminds me of dreams, but how stupid does that sound? Well, anyways, it was lovely. -Whitt Love is never foolish- and if it is, it is a Divine Foolishness. |
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