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Teen Poetry #8

First post in 3 years.

thinktwice
Member

since 2003-12-23

Posts 125
United States

0 posted 2007-01-27 07:45 PM

...We're caught on details confined
inside white linen pinned to nametags.

...Selfishness rides over our lives
for all our happiness and all our joy.

...We've fought this life too long,
caught in laziness, our days gone to
Hearts on white linen sleeves

...Posturing ourselves needlessly
for loss of innocence,
for the artistic shots,
angeling our expressions

...Running forever,
wandering thru sketches with vigor,
these mindless days bread hunger
for all our days lossed in number

...Browning in acceptance,
taking moments to memory
for the words they speak
grab attention from the tension,
closing us in, feeding us fiction.

These days die in eventual reason
coming full circle, reaching absolution
All is left
All is left

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2007-01-28 05:34 PM

wow.. this was great. It's so good to read something with this form and emotion. I loved it. Great Job! Hope to read more soon.

Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

2 posted 2007-01-31 02:28 PM

I didn't get the significance of the "hearts on white linens"

chiLanta
Junior Member

since 2006-12-01

Posts 47

3 posted 2007-01-31 07:05 PM

rhia have you heard the expression "She has her heart on her sleeve" in other words leaving you heart out using your heart for eveything eventually it gets broke

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

4 posted 2007-02-01 01:49 PM

Now I have. thanks

thinktwice
Member

since 2003-12-23

Posts 125
United States

6 posted 2007-02-03 04:35 PM

I appreciate the comments and subtle critiques.

To explain a little (much of my writing can be confusing), its metaphor after metaphor(obviously).

White linen represents purity and the contrast with which we see both the heart and the name.

White linen could also represent the stereotype placed on those who haven't broken free of there childlike innocence.

To boil it all down to a sentence, the whole poem is a struggle with innocence.

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