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Lost At Sea |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! 
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its raining outside the drops beat down and i can hear them hit the ground so softly, so softly and i cant stand to hear you cry so please just dry your eyes wipe away the tears put away the goodbyes sunken dreams in a deep black sea make me fall down to my knees as it grows dark and hard to breath i just close my eyes and dream sorry i couldnt make it right before the pain and before the fights i want to take all this away i wish there was some way, just some way... no more more hopes and no more dreams there were lost out at sea im sorry im sorry |
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wwzwlmd8 Member
since 2006-09-23
Posts 96San Diego,CA |
Not a thing needs to be change it was a really great poem and I can really relate to it. This poem made me feel what you were writing about and it was a really asome and intense, and I loved it. p.s read my poem I just posted up |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
wow. |
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