One Last Dance Sequal To Tempest's Pretty Pretty

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Teen Poetry #8

One Last Dance Sequal To Tempest's Pretty Pretty

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2006-11-17 06:57 PM

Ok, Tempest's last poem Pretty Pretty, captured an insperation for a sequal, so i asked him today and he said i could write one.. So i'm here to make Tempest proud.....

One Last Dance *Sequal To Tempest's Pretty Pretty*

Red silk fabric hanging from my petite figure
My eyes sparkle like a rainbow and on you they linger
My hair glistening under the disco ball
The gold tiara twinkle’s, and across the room you call.

You tried to give me all you had but somehow it wasn’t enough
The fear that lingers in me hides all that’s rough and tough
I’m sorry that I hurt you, I really truly am
You gave everything away for me; you wanted to be my man

I love you; don’t get me wrong I do
I have been hurt so many times before but now somehow all I want is you.
I’ve fallen in love when I never thought I could,
You’ve showed me what its like to re-write the bad times with good

Come take my hand and let me make you believe
That even though I am distant, our feelings we can’t deceive
Just tell me how you feel before out the door you prance
Take my body in a warm embrace and let us have one last dance

nick_lyss
Member

since 2006-08-21

Posts 88

1 posted 2006-11-17 07:55 PM

i really liked this. i think you did make him proud. really well written

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

2 posted 2006-11-18 05:41 AM

If tempest isn't proud hes crazy. Wow awesome write on its own. ONe of my favorites from you. But also a wonderful sequel.

Good job

Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

3 posted 2006-11-18 07:35 AM

I AM SO PROUD THAT I ALMOST DIED!!! wow jess this piece was sooooo much better than the one i wrote. im really glad that the first one was good enough for you to want to write a sequal to it.

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

4 posted 2007-06-20 06:52 PM

you shouldnt have left either. i love you jess. and i love your poetry more.

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

5 posted 2007-06-21 06:10 PM

it was a poem of all poems i think you should be very proud of yourself

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