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Teen Poetry #8

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Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-10-09 06:09 PM

The clincher is coming
Her hands close tight
She wont go down
Without a fight

Insipid; her fears
They are simply reformed
Dedicated to the situation
Her mind is reborn

A new soul awakes
From the ashes of old
Those once friendly eyes
Now empty and cold

A diffrent person
In the same sad skin
A tormented angel
That wishes the end

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2006-10-09 11:42 PM

this was very awesome it had an interesting prospect of being reborn i loved it and thanks for posting back on teen poetry again missed your poems

hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-10-10 12:09 PM

"A new soul awakes
From the ashes of old
Those once friendly eyes
Now empty and cold"

It IS an interesting idea about being reborn. The outcome is not what one would expect, it's different from the norm, if you know what I mean.

Thanks for sharing this piece, I enjoyed reading it

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->---

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

3 posted 2007-06-20 06:48 PM

dude, your shouldnt have gotten kicked off. your stuff is better than robert frost.

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

4 posted 2007-06-21 06:09 PM

the whole thing was good the rhymns just rolled of the tongue it was fabulous

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