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Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

0 posted 2008-10-25 01:21 PM

Um this was done for drama class based on an orange gourd my group carved. For those of you who don't know orange gourd carving is what you call pumpkin carving when you don't want anyone to know you're celebrating Halloween.

There’s a monster in the closet
A spider in my bed
A simple kind of poison
A fear inside my head

Run you foolish mortal
I’m stronger than your all
I’ll whisper in your ear
And laugh as you fall

Here’s the greatest monster
A child screams tonight
I’ve never known a greater
For causing endless fright

Here’s a deadly spider
Insidious and near
A simple kind of poison
A fear I hold too dear

Here it is a knowledge
The power of my fate
Hear the whispered words
Know that it’s too late

Here I am an adult
A fool and a sage
Run the veins of power
The wisdom of my age

Here I am a child
A monster of the night
My own poison, feeling
Brings my greatest fright

There’s a monster in the closet
A spider in my bed
A simple kind of poison
A lovely kind of dread

OH SHUT UP SHUT UP AND GIVE SOMEONE ELSE A CHANCE!!!!

RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

1 posted 2008-10-25 04:24 PM

Awww it's prettyful!...

Okay that sounded a bit ghey of me. Anyhoo.. loved it all!!.. Us aussies don't clebrate halloween n i don't think i've ever seen a REAL carved pumpkin only the ones of which i've seen in movies. .....

Ur Cheeki Mr Robertson Very Cheeky... And the talent title holder of TEEN...

Happy Pumpkin'ing

Jess

Leanne <3
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since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

2 posted 2008-10-26 03:11 AM

wow i really loved this poem
it sounded almost as though you were daring somone to open the closet or something

great write

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

3 posted 2008-10-26 01:31 PM

So your not the only one to celebrate too eh? Great poem. Just right for the Halloween mood.

-Zach

"I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!"

Dark Star
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since 2008-02-20

Posts 392
Lost in your eyes

4 posted 2008-10-26 03:28 PM

nice fall poem

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

5 posted 2008-10-27 06:55 PM

Thanks for reading you guys!

Revenge you are much to kind to me, I'm not that great. And Leanne you are amazingly insightful, although the "closet" is a different metephor than it is usually used for.

OH SHUT UP SHUT UP AND GIVE SOMEONE ELSE A CHANCE!!!!

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

6 posted 2008-10-30 12:07 PM

Good flow. I liked it. I still feel that your desire to stick to rhyme schemes greatly inhibits you, but this is your expression not mine. i'm probably just jealous.

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

7 posted 2008-10-30 07:11 PM

Thanks Alex. You may be right you know...Then again rhymeing poems tend to have better flow than those that don't.
meh! I've always been jealous of your crypticness so...it's a trade off I guess.

OH SHUT UP SHUT UP AND GIVE SOMEONE ELSE A CHANCE!!!!

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