Teen Poetry #8 |
Handle With Care |
pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
Be gentle, honey Handle with care For I am breakable Hold me close Just for a moment Let all that's bad Fade away from me I've been saving Millions of smiles Reaching all the way up To my big blue eyes Just for you Maybe I'll let you see one ...Or two As long as you're careful baby For I am so fragile My heart and my world Are made of rose-colored glass Caution, Honey, Handle with Care |
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BeyaK Member
since 2008-08-07
Posts 126Philippines |
love reading it...sweet with a nice flow. :-) ~~*K. B.*~~ |
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Taylor See Member
since 2008-10-07
Posts 55North Carolina, US |
Good poem. I like the idea and the flow you created. The one suggestion I have is in the line about saving smiles, instead of saying "reaching" use a different world like stacking (Not really stacking, but a verb like it)so that the millions of smiles are stacking (again, not necessarily that exact word) up to your eyes. Keep going! -Taylor And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall |
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