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Teen Poetry #8

Please, Hurry Up And Find Me

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

0 posted 2008-10-05 08:49 PM

I would love it
if I could feel renewed.
To love and be loved,
by one person
who knows why I bite my lip,
and what I think about
when my eyelash twitches.

I would live off of
the love he had for me...
if only it was there.
Becasue we could be happy
forever and ever always
knowing each others secrets,
and why they are actually secrets.

Everyday I feel as though
I've been ripped apart,
and I'm waiting for someone to
glue me back together,
strong and secure
and to never break again.
But when will that ever happen?

When will someone
answer my question I have?
Am I always being ignored
like the dust on the cluttered shelves?
Is there a reason why
no one has come to make me
feel open and free again?

Or are you secretly out
there reading this...
feeling the same way,
as you too wonder what happened?
Because if you are,
please hurry up and find me...
so we can be happy together.

Okay, so I'm finally back. I've been having writer's block for a really long time, and now when I was on facebook an idea popped into my head and I had to get it down. So tell me what you think, because it always helps me to write more

.:~]Julianna[~:.

"Somewhere under the rainbow...there will be thunderstorms."

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

1 posted 2008-10-05 11:37 PM

Wow, i loved reading this cuz it reminds me of how i feel. I hope you find that person!

Live in the present but don't forget the future

Taylor See
Member

since 2008-10-07

Posts 55
North Carolina, US

2 posted 2008-10-07 02:47 PM

Great job! Very personal and heartfelt.

Honestly I feel this way sometimes myself.

The one thing I noticed is you miss-spelled "because"

here:

I would live off of
the love he had for me...
if only it was there.
>Becasue< we could be happy

Not a big deal, just wanted to let you know.

Keep writing!

-Taylor

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

3 posted 2008-10-07 05:15 PM

haha, thanks. i honestly never noticed until i went and reread that part, lol.

.:~]Julianna[~:.

"Somewhere under the rainbow...there will be thunderstorms."

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