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prettypinkrebel
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since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

0 posted 2008-10-03 09:19 AM

Life can be cut to short so quickly you  never know what to expect. ie for example in the small town i live in three high school boys just wrecked, leaving one with his back broken one with the possiblity of amputation of his foot and the other in a comma. this is just a realization that life doesnt always go as you plan..
Just a simple joy ride on the way to the hunting ground
no one forsaw what would really happen As the jeep began to swerve and spin.

A little fun no one saw any harm, no one knew
What would happen to the three of you

News spread of the wreck and rumors began to fly
no one  knew what to expect would you live or die

I cant believe this is  happening everything so fast,
now were all left wondering which breath could be your last,

Life is full of moments that you never do see comming
This is just another leaving many with a warning/.

Dedication:

I love you Coty, I hope you make it!!!!!!!!!

SEA

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Member Seraphic

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1 posted 2008-10-03 11:43 AM

I hope those boys will be ok. How sad....

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

2 posted 2008-10-03 07:10 PM

Wow, really sad I hope they will be okay, to.

Live in the present but don't forget the future

Taylor See
Member

since 2008-10-07

Posts 55
North Carolina, US

3 posted 2008-10-07 03:21 PM

That's really sad! And the poem is great, I like how you captured the somber mood.

And as for a title, perhaps:

Joy Ride

It hit me the right way as an ironic title that contrasted with the poem. Just an idea.

And as each player moves their piece, confident and tall
They forget that they can move themselves, in the greatest game of all

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2008-10-08 08:17 AM

Oh I know that feeling too. I hope your friends recover and are doing well. I'll keep them in my prayers! Great poem!

-Zach

"I'd rather be anything but ordinary!!"

gator89
Junior Member

since 2008-10-08

Posts 12
Ohio, USA

5 posted 2008-10-10 01:31 AM

this one really hit home for me as i've been in a similar situation with some friends. good poem as sad as it is. your friends are in my prayers

“I'd rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I am not.” -Kurt Cobain RIP

prettypinkrebel
Member

since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

6 posted 2008-10-14 01:07 AM

thanks to you all. in case ne one checks in heres a lil update. one of the boys is home on bed rest, while one is back at school however coty is still not doing well and is still in a coma so thanks for keeping them in your prayers.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

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7 posted 2008-10-14 02:31 AM

I am sending my thoughts to your friends. How sad this is.

Maybe just call it "Thoughts for Coty"

Hang in there.

A

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