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Teen Poetry #8

bullets will be your end

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2008-09-15 10:20 AM

here it is
and here we stand

back to back like gunslingers
we count off our steps

1-2-3-4-5...
now the bloodshed begins

bullets go bang
as we stand here to hang

this violence is fame
the angels sang

its your one way ticket out
and the only thing you know

sorry for you
because all you knew

was that bullets
will be your end too

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

1 posted 2008-09-15 12:37 PM

Maybe its just me, but i got some neat images of that. I really liked it.

Becca

The hollow emptiness, the crazed thoughts left to survive

Sara Mikael
Junior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 34

2 posted 2008-09-15 07:17 PM

I loved it ...and thanks for your advice about my poem and I think you are right ,and I have to do some improvement

THE PAIN OF LOVE

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

3 posted 2008-09-15 07:29 PM

this poem was awesome it gave me a different view on stuff like that and it allowed me to picture it in my head

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

4 posted 2008-09-16 04:59 AM

Loved it as per usual... amazing talent behind those eyes

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