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Teen Poetry #8

This Feeling Of Love

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

0 posted 2008-09-14 02:34 PM

This feeling of love
is so very strong.
The whispers of forever
wanting to last longer.

This feeling of love
is uncontainable and amazing.
Everything unexpected is so
sweet and wonderful.

This feeling of love
lasts as long as its on fire.
A fire that burns with intensity
and whose chemistry is incredible.

This feeling of love is
wasted and entirely empty.
For when will there be
someone to love me back?

Okay so I wrote this yesterday night when I was feeling horrible. This poem really sucks to me, but tell me how you like it, or if you don't that's fine too. It's good to be back on pip.

~*Julianna*~

"You don't know me...but I know you. That's all that matters right now... Mr.Rainey!" - Secret Window

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

1 posted 2008-09-14 04:37 PM

i think it was good and understandable

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

2 posted 2008-09-15 01:18 PM

It was really good, some thing easy to read, and to easy to understand, but hold on to your love till your heart finds some one to love.

The hollow emptiness, the crazed thoughts left to survive

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

3 posted 2008-09-29 05:19 PM

Thanks to the both of you who reviewed. I didn't think this poem would get anything, but I guess I was wrong. And I will hold on to that love...as long as I can.

~*Julianna*~

"Somewhere under the rainbow...there will be thunderstorms."

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